The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of British people donating money to charity by five different age groups for the years 1990 and 2010.
Overall, while the first three age groups (18-25, 26-35, 36-50) received a significant amount of money in 1990, the other two groups obtained much money in 2010. Another interesting feature is that 18-25 age groups collected the lowest amount in the given period in the question.
In 1990, 26-35 and 36-50 age groups were donated by about one-third and two-fifths of the total, compared to 24% and 35% in 2010 respectively. Nearly 18% of British folks contributed money for 18-25 groups in 1990, whereas the figure shrunk to around 6% in 2010, three times lower than the former year.
In contrast, 51-65 and >65 age groups exhibited opposite trends. The percent for 2010 was slightly higher than 1990 as 35% vs 39% for 51-65 and 33% vs 35% for >65 age groups. 39% regarding the 51-65 groups constituted the highest proportion for the year 2010.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
read topic carefully. it is about donating/giving money, not receiving money or donated by:
Overall, while the first three age groups (18-25, 26-35, 36-50) received a significant amount of money in 1990, the other two groups obtained much money in 2010. Another interesting feature is that 18-25 age groups collected the lowest amount in the given period in the question.
26-35 and 36-50 age groups were donated by about one-third and two-fifths of the total
should be: 26-35 and 36-50 age groups donated about one-third and two-fifths of the total
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 9
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 10
No. of Words: 169 200
No. of Characters: 787 1000
No. of Different Words: 91 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.606 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.657 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.408 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 53 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 32 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 22 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 14 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.125 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.153 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.491 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.754 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.152 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 261, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e highest proportion for the year 2010.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, regarding, third, whereas, while, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 1.0 5.60731707317 18% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 33.7804878049 65% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 831.0 965.302439024 86% => OK
No of words: 169.0 196.424390244 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91715976331 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60555127546 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39905622002 2.65546596893 90% => OK
Unique words: 96.0 106.607317073 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.568047337278 0.547539520022 104% => OK
syllable_count: 206.1 283.868780488 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.45097560976 83% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.6726185054 43.030603864 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.875 112.824112599 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.125 22.9334400587 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.625 5.23603664747 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203316819445 0.215688989381 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107906246997 0.103423049105 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0754361106618 0.0843802449381 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157300122271 0.15604864568 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0781929417422 0.0819641961636 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.2329268293 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 84.0 61.2550243902 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.3012195122 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 11.4140731707 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.06136585366 100% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 40.7170731707 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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