QuestionThe bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The bar graph compares the proportions of different gender exercising frequently including young generations and old generations in 2010.

It is noticeable that females over age 25 had higher percentages than males, while young boys at the age of 15-24 did physical activities more often than girls. Moreover, Australian engaging in physical activities corresponded to approximately 40% to 55%.

It is worth to mention that women’s percentages beyond the age of 65 were nearly equal to men’s percentages, which accounted for 46.7% and 47.2% respectively in the analysis. In contrast, significant differences between different gender appeared in the group 35 to 44 years old by 13%.

According to the trend in 2010, percentages slightly rose from 47.7% to 53.3% when women became older, however, there was a drop by 47.1% in the oldest group aged over 65. In addition, young boys aged below 24 spent more time exercising revealed the highest proportions, 52.8%, which reduced year by year then went up again after they were 45 years old.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, moreover, then, while, in addition, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 33.7804878049 89% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 895.0 965.302439024 93% => OK
No of words: 168.0 196.424390244 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32738095238 4.92477711251 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60020574368 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9563145838 2.65546596893 111% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 106.607317073 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.690476190476 0.547539520022 126% => OK
syllable_count: 254.7 283.868780488 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.8173672289 43.030603864 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.857142857 112.824112599 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 22.9334400587 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.57142857143 5.23603664747 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203722904693 0.215688989381 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0883592326454 0.103423049105 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0268488050841 0.0843802449381 32% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112943610425 0.15604864568 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0300889176999 0.0819641961636 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.2329268293 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 61.2550243902 91% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 11.4140731707 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.06136585366 107% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 40.7170731707 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.4329268293 114% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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