Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two or five) should not be allowed
It is true that television highly affects our minds, especially advertising. When it comes to this topic many people assume that television advertising directed toward young children under the age of five should be prohibited. As for me, I cast doubts on this argument's validity. Thus, in my own opinion, advertising directed towards small kids should be allowed for a few reasons. First, because it is not as harmful for kids as it is considered to be, and second, it can be very useful for parents.
Some people believe that advertising influences a child's mind in a wrong way. According to this opinion, kids see things that some companies offer to them on television and start to ask their parents to buy it. However, not every parent can afford such purchases. As small children do not think about money they begin to insist, cry and behave badly. Besides, many assume that television advertising may teach kids wrong things. Even though I concede that this argument is reasonable I still do not agree that advertising directed toward kids should not be shown on TV. In fact, kids aged under five do not usually pay much attention to advertising which they see and, moreover, do not analyze it. Usually they do not keep in mind for a long time what they get from television. After all, at this stage of childhood it is parents who decide what their young children should watch on television. Thus, they can simply switch off a TV or change a channel when such advertising appears.
In addition, advertising can be very useful for parents. It is a way to show what products are good for their kids, what is new in this industry in order to make a process of raising easier. For example, I have a friend with a small baby and she says that television advertising helps her a lot. In her words, she does not know anybody with small kids to get an advice from and her own mom is very old-fashioned. As my friend does not go out that much, turns out that Internet and television are only ways for her to get news about products for children.
To sum it up, even though there are arguments to be made against television advertising directed towards young children, I strongly believe that it should be allowed because it can be very helpful for parents.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...bited. As for me, I cast doubts on this arguments validity. Thus, in my own opinion, adve...
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...at advertising influences a childs mind in a wrong way. According to this opinion, kids see th...
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...dvertising may teach kids wrong things. Even though I concede that this argument is reasona...
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'advice'.
Suggestion: advice
...not know anybody with small kids to get an advice from and her own mom is very old-fashio...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, however, may, moreover, second, so, still, thus, after all, as for, for example, in addition, in fact, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1858.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 400.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.645 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5640544066 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.4875 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 569.7 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.4322062939 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.4761904762 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0476190476 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.14285714286 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.368386736432 0.236089414692 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110871302841 0.076458572812 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.13490389991 0.0737576698707 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.28347575248 0.150856017488 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.141687379011 0.0645574589148 219% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.83 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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