In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it a valuable work experience, which is important for learning and taking responsibility. What is your opinion?
These days, there are some children in many nations who are involved in some sort of paid work. It is often argued by some people that children should focus on study, while others insist that working experience in childhood can be a beneficial opportunity for them to develop their social skill such as responsibility. In this essay, I will discuss why I agree that children should be engaged in paid work.
In my view, studying at school itself is not enough for children to start working as a professional after they graduate from school. In work environments, people usually need to possess not only knowledge for their job but also a proper mindset such as responsibility as a professional. In terms of the point above, being engaged in some paid work in childhood is quite beneficial for children to acquire such a sense. For example, cleaning floor or washing dishes might be suitable tasks for them. By paying a small amount of money, children will be more responsible for their performance at work.
Some people tend to claim that children should not work, because they consider working in childhood as something that negatively affects children's study. If children work very hard to gain money, they cannot spend enough time to study. However, children can be involved in paid work only after school for a short time, which will not influence their performance of study badly. In addition, working experience with a sense of achievement and small amount of money will encourage children to be more energetic about their study as well.
In conclusion, as long as children can keep up with their study at school, I believe that the experience of engagement in paid work is quite essential for children to develop their sense of responsibility and motivation.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ch as responsibility as a professional. In terms of the point above, being engaged...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, well, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, sort of, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1477.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 298.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95637583893 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72873270273 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510067114094 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 447.3 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.7729151717 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.615384615 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9230769231 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.46153846154 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321039421712 0.244688304435 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144501069606 0.084324248473 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0702049085704 0.0667982634062 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227454539959 0.151304729494 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0778727288776 0.056905535591 137% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 78.4519038076 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.