Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours.
It is incontrovertibly axiomatic that in today's modern world working has an important role in people's life. because, having a prosperous life is not possible without a decent job. Assorted approach could be impelemented by employers to manage the working times and presence of employees such as the amount of presence time in a day, the number of working days in a week, to name but two. With this in mind, a heated controversy exists among people as to whether a decent and enjoyable job should have three working days a week with a longer hours or five working days a week with shorter hours. Although it is little hard to reach a consensus on this issue, I am, to great extent, on the belief that having a job with five working days and shorter hours is more enjoyable for quite a few reasons, among which, the most conspicuous ones are substantiated in the following paragraph.
To commence, the first exquisite reason which advocate my viewpoint is that five working days with shorter hours is more beneficial for people and their families. In today's chaotic world with galloping progress of technology and competition among different company, employers are absolutely under increasingly pressure during their working hours. It is stand to reason that they obviously get tired with a long working days and as a consequence, when they come back to home, they would not have enough energy and patience for their family member, which not only may lead to several problems in their relationship with other family members, but also would have many serious influences on their mind and personlity, which may cause severe emotional depression. Moreover, all people believe that their personal life and family is more important than anything else, even their work. With a shorter working hours in a day, individuals certainly are more energetic and can get home earlier and have more time to enjoy their personal life, chat with their family member, and go to downtown for having a dinner in a nice restuarant with their family. Therefore, by providing this approach for people's job, they would have more chances to be prosperous in both their personal life and their job.
Alongside the above reason elaborated above, the fact that more working hours in a day bring about less efficiency and accuracy in work is another point which requires meticulous attention. It is confirmed that during a long hours working, individuals become exhausted and consequently, their accuracy would decrease considerably. Accordingly, the probability of making mistakes increases significantly, which may have a irreparable consequences in thier work, even leading to get fired from their job. However, with a shorter working time, individuals can effectively concentrate on their work and do their best with a high level of energy. Another concomitant efficacy of working five days a week has to do with psychological issues, according to that, with this approach employees have more sense of self-satisfaction resulted from an appropriate and efficient balance between their working times and free times. The noteworthy interesting research conducted in my country, Iran, illustrates that 90 percent of the employees working only seven hours a days with five working days in a week, have a high level of mental and physical health, in addition, the probability of getting promotion in their job is significantly more than other employees, due to devoting all of their attention and concentration to the job. Hence, these worthwhile statistics throw some light on the point that working shorter hours in a day has worthwhile influences on the performance and the morale of employees, which bring for them both contentment and prosperity.
Drawing upon the reasons, although there are some exceptions which are excluded from the general rule, I do agree that the benefits of working five days in a week with shorter hours take precedence over those of working three days a week with longer hours. To recapitulate the reasons, not only do the agreed approach has more benefit for people in their relationship with their families, but also can gauarantee their success in their job. Consequently, I strongly recommend that people consider this factors in accepting job offers.
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- Integrated TPO 45 73
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Message: “because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, while, as to, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 100.0 52.1666666667 192% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3570.0 1977.66487455 181% => OK
No of words: 694.0 407.700716846 170% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14409221902 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.13262893113 4.48103885553 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83830364429 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 305.0 212.727598566 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.439481268012 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1098.9 618.680645161 178% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 15.0 4.94265232975 303% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 33.0 20.1344086022 164% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 88.1338654054 48.9658058833 180% => OK
Chars per sentence: 170.0 100.406767564 169% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.0476190476 20.6045352989 160% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.14285714286 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.412295450934 0.236089414692 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.155603854705 0.076458572812 204% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0916224675392 0.0737576698707 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.31657755711 0.150856017488 210% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0588861477975 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.3 11.7677419355 164% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 58.1214874552 65% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 10.1575268817 159% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 153.0 86.8835125448 176% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.0537634409 151% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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