Topic - prevention is better than cure
Out of country’s budget,a large proportion of money should be diverted from treatments to spending on health education and preventive measures .
To what extent do you agree or disagree ?
It is often argued that more money should be spent on preventive measures than on remedies,as it is easier to stop anything from happening in the first place than to repair the damage after it has happened .I completely agree that big portion of monetary budget of a country should be allocated to health education and preventive measure ,which will be elaborated further .
To begin with,there is an urgent need to teach people about the health .Everybody should apparently have specific knowledge of what is good or bad for their health ,and also about the methods to ameliorate their immune systems to dodge any sort of deformity in future .Indeed ,most of the nations are not emphasising much on this aspect ,and they are stressing more on upgradation of their current curing methods .In uk ,for example ,government organises many health related seminars weekly in all the major cities to encourage people to stay healthy by doing exercise or any sort of physical activity .This actually paves the way to good health of community .
Secondly,it is important to find appropriate vaccine in advance to evade any kind of foreseeable deformity . This task requires plethora research and money to accomplish ,and it could take several months or years to complete .For instance ,fatal Malaria was spread in many countries in Africa in 2010,and killed countless numbers of people .However,Nigeria was the only country succeeded in avoiding it ,as they had already found a preventive vaccination prior to its occurrence there .Hence ,preventing any disease should be the first consideration rather than dealing with it afterwards .
To conclude,huge proportion of any country’s financial budget should be diverted towards the education regarding health ,and also in finding the suitable method to halt any predictable affliction .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, apparently, first, hence, however, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, kind of, sort of, to begin with, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1544.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 292.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28767123288 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88474583815 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.63698630137 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 487.8 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 16.0721442886 31% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 58.0 20.2975951904 286% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 196.551672595 49.4020404114 398% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 308.8 106.682146367 289% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 58.4 20.7667163134 281% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 33.2 7.06120827912 470% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 39.0 5.01903807615 777% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271732975036 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.142877398262 0.084324248473 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112850126883 0.0667982634062 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174715573643 0.151304729494 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0998821446346 0.056905535591 176% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 32.7 13.0946893788 250% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 4.15 50.2224549098 8% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.44779559118 196% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 27.1 11.3001002004 240% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.29 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.16 8.58950901804 130% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 30.0 9.78957915832 306% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 25.2 10.1190380762 249% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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