Some students take one year off between finishing school and going to university, in order to work or travel. Do you think advantages outweigh disadvantages?
These days, education plays an important role in the life. Some young people spend one year either working or having some excursions to choose between finishing school and going to further education. In my opinion, it has more benefits than drawbacks and the essay will discuss in great detail.
To begin with, during one year, the young could go somewhere and have some jobs to make up their correct mind. In other words, many students could be not suitable to study at the university so they need to have a period time to determine their goal. It allows people to have more experiences in their life and discovery and improve their talents on which are not focus at the university. In addition, it could reduce student loan because the young will expend a lot of money learning further education. For example, during a year, students could develop their social skills and have an amount of experience which is very useful to solve practical problems in their life. Therefore, one year is essential for young citizens to make a truly decision.
Besides that, it also has some negative aspects. It means that some student could earn so a quantity of money that they do not want to study continuously. It is because they could have to consume or borrow the big amount of income to learn at tertiary education. For instance, the young can make 100 dollars per week as long as they do part-time job while they will spend 1000 dollars going to school. Thus, it will cause that educational standard of people decrease gradually.
In conclusion, some young people who are learning at the school spend a year traveling or working to decide between finishing school and going to university. I strongly believe that it have a lot of advantages.
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Message: You used an adverb ('truly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('decision') instead of another adjective.
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Suggestion:
...lieve that it have a lot of advantages.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, if, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1440.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 301.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78405315615 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47330980649 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.528239202658 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 450.0 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.2900102473 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.0 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8125 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.125 7.06120827912 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221219145601 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0748517336393 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100065432792 0.0667982634062 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171932401271 0.151304729494 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0809309202591 0.056905535591 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.0946893788 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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