TPO-01 - Independent Writing Task
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Sports and social activities are beneficial for students which can strengthens their physical and emotional well being. In my opinion, funding this area should also receive the exact financial support like classes and libraries are receiving. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, sports can enhance physical health by being at topmost condition. Being a part of sports in universities and colleges will motivate students to exercise a lot and to condition their selves in games or in competition. Students also, are obliged to follow healthy diet, thus, can lead to pristine health. My own experience is when i am in college varsity team for volleyball, I become health conscious on my diet and overall health. I follow the advise of my coach to sleep full 8 hours of sleep a day, eat a healthy diet and avoid fatty foods, so, following the his advise makes me a healthier person. I open my eyes that health is wealth and I should take good care of my body, also, my coach instilled in my mind that it is better to be addicted to sports than to be involved in vices. Funding on sports in colleges will help the future students to become more aware of their health and also it can avoid being addicted to bad vices like smoking, drinking alcohol or drugs, hence, their attention would be focused on sports rather than vices.
Secondly, being involved in social activities such as environmental conservation also is helpful in community. In a sense that, more people will become involved in taking care of the environment. Social activities like conducting talks to the community will make a difference to spread awareness and responsibility in preserving the ecosystem.For Instance, Our group has helped a lot of communities to give back to the environment merely by simple things like not throwing garbage in the streets. We also come up with fund raising event to buy seedlings and fertilizer to plant on an area which has few living trees on it. This social activities mold me to become an better person, thus, made an impact on my life to care for the environment. This move can also help prevent further global warming and destruction of habitat of animals.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that sports and social activities should also receive the same funding like libraries and classes are allocated. This is because sports help students to be healthy individual and avoid being addicted to bad vices. Social activities like environmental conservation helps the environment to prevent further global warming.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, if, second, secondly, so, still, then, thus, well, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, such as, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2152.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 436.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93577981651 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74544254351 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490825688073 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 669.6 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.3649926547 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.263157895 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9473684211 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.57894736842 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.134117199889 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0511217487714 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0521252839339 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107577065142 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0483732111493 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.