Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim AND the reason on which that claim is based.
The author claims that young people should opt for worthy goals, instead of following their dreams. I, for one, believe that having an agenda (being selfish) is of paramount in achieving anything. Dreams are the one thing that keeps us all going. But that does not mean, for example, to dream of becoming a dictator just for the sake of power. Having a selfish aim of growth of ones nation is an amzing dream to have. Not only is it worthy, but is also driven by this mere selfishness.
Firstly, what are worthy goals? It is not necessary that 'worthy goals' and sheer 'dreams' are mutually exclusive. For example, Gandhiji had a dream of free India. Isn't this a worthy goal? It counts as all three - a dream, a worthy goal and also a selfish wish. Therefore, defining the concept of 'worthy goals, here is very important.
Secondly, I do agree that talent without a proper direction can be wasted. Meaning, just having a dream is not sufficient. Weighing it's 'worthiness' gives it a cause. Drives the dreamer to fulfill it with great zeal. For example, the want of becoming a billionaire is just selfish. Unless, the drive behind it was to end up helping others and giving back to the society. "I want to be a billionaire one day and help build a community center for the people in my area, where I grew up looking at the poverty. Building factories will help in having 24 hour electricity and bring jobs to my hometown." That is, I do echo the 'drive' sense of this assertion (worthy goal) made by the author.
All in all, I partially do agree with the author that knowing the worthiness of a dream is something to emphasize on. Else, it is just a one person dream and might not have great consequences that it deserves. However, following ones dreams doesn't always mean it is a selfish act. It could be counted as a worthy goal too.
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- Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which 50
- Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which 63
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...n what the committee is trying to sell. Since it leaves a lot of unanswered questions...
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Message: “Even if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...rs? What all do they have in common? Even if the author answers all the questions ab...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, look, may, so, still, then, well, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 55.5748502994 61% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1567.0 2260.96107784 69% => OK
No of words: 321.0 441.139720559 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88161993769 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56035773237 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532710280374 0.468620217663 114% => OK
syllable_count: 491.4 705.55239521 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 22.8473053892 57% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.1815821778 57.8364921388 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 68.1304347826 119.503703932 57% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 13.9565217391 23.324526521 60% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 2.60869565217 5.70786347227 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.67664670659 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241543185995 0.218282227539 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0647530201371 0.0743258471296 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0692885494139 0.0701772020484 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15553398204 0.128457276422 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0463294429536 0.0628817314937 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 14.3799401198 59% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 48.3550499002 138% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 12.197005988 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 10.43 12.5979740519 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.32208582834 88% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 98.500998004 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 11.1389221557 65% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.9071856287 59% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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