Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Telephone has greater influence on people’s lives than television has.
By and large, communication devices have had a far-reaching effect on people's lives. Its importance leads to some controversy; some people want to know if Telephone has a greater influence on people's lives, in contrast, I personally believe that Television has a greater effect on people's lives. In the lines follow, I will investigate two reasons to shed light on my response.
One of the paramount reasons which deserves to be mentioned for is that Television has brought about awareness of our environment. This awareness not only could be political but also environmental. Knowing about the environmental effect would lead to a better and healthier life. One of the environmental aspects is pollution. Controlling pollution partly is on the hand of government policies and manufactories. Indeed, in some cases, people are able to play and pivotal rule by refusing to drop their unused materials into the rivers. Take, for example, the Karoon's river is located in Isfahan and many farmers are dependent on this river. When people used to put their garbage into the river, the farmer's crops gradually started to perish. Therefore, the government decided to propagate advertisements on television to aware people of their deeds which caused drying out of farmers' products. Propagating such awareness, the river revived and the water turned back lucid.
Another reason coming to mind is that TV has many training programs which provide people with a free and efficient source of knowledge. These programs include cooking, education, hiking, and so forth. Take, for example, students in Iran that live in the villages far away from eminent teachers and are going to attend the entrance exam. These students usually follow on governmental programs on TV to preparing for the exam. Although many students cost large money for private classes to succeed, these students most often achieve a better rank in the exam. If not for TV ability, these students wouldn't flourish.
In conclusion, to sum both reasons up, let use the Pareto rule which also known as 80/20 rule. In a nutshell, when come to making a decision, availing 20 percent of reasons could fulfil 80 percent of the solution. Therefore, both discussed reasons are sufficient to substantiate the contention that TV has a greater effect on people's lives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, in contrast, by and large, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 43.0788530466 44% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1938.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 375.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.168 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83799741602 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562666666667 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 606.6 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.6659309969 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.0909090909 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0454545455 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.45454545455 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130568615579 0.236089414692 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0314529561034 0.076458572812 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0476460573663 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0807184296007 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.063674783293 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.41 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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