TPO 21- Independent
It goes without saying that in such a sophisticated world where calmness has a most important feature of everyone. The ability of relaxation is back forward to people’s characteristics which is related to the psychological aspect of human and is independent of other achievements. Some people may hold the view that the ability to relax well to people is the most important factor to success in their future job. However, some others may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that studying hard at university is the important one. So, from my perspective, I strongly support the argument that the ability to relax well has a prominent role to succeed. Of the countless reasons and examples, I will present the most essential and conspicuous ones here.
The first exquisite point comes to mind is the relationship between fatigue and stress and job performance. There is no doubt that the work environment is full of work-related stress, debates, and pressures . in which all members have the unique goal that is the firm’s progress. Thus, each employee can succeed in his job if he is able to handle this situation and relax well. To illustrate, I would like to mention the recent research has been conducted at the University of MIT. In this research the job performance of the employees has been assessed before and after they learned self-control techniques. The results are demonstrated the significant increase in job performance of employees after they learned how can cope with stress in the workplace.
Another equally important reason (significant point) is the ability to adapt to different situations which are the result of the ability to relax well. If a person has the ability to relax, he will be able to adapt himself to different situations and interact with different characters in order to pursue his purpose which is the key factor to succeed. Therefore, he can make some goods decisions and handle the meeting – on (about) his job which leads him to succeed in future jobs.
In conclusion, from my vantage point, I back up the idea that the ability to relax well has an impressive impact on success in the future job rather than studying hard in s. I completely believe that possessing the relax character is essential to achieve good positions.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 206, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...k-related stress, debates, and pressures . in which all members have the unique go...
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Line 2, column 209, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...elated stress, debates, and pressures . in which all members have the unique goal ...
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Line 4, column 211, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...s. I completely believe that possessing the relax character is essential to achieve good ...
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Line 4, column 271, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...is essential to achieve good positions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, in conclusion, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1899.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 381.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9842519685 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89341868025 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.50656167979 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 593.1 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.1836950906 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.5 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1666666667 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.16666666667 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0130820850048 0.236089414692 6% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00466442588785 0.076458572812 6% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0192319206185 0.0737576698707 26% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.00728254914949 0.150856017488 5% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0126137451355 0.0645574589148 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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