Some people argue that high sales of some popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising not the real need of consumer. Do you agree or disagree?
In the modern era, social media such as television and internet have important role in daily life people. One of the significant part of media is commercial. Some critic believes that publicity effect to purchaser for buying new merchandise without require them. From where I stand, this proposal shows power of advertising for sale goods and influence on buyers.
To begin with, most company for sale their article, using power of advertising. Compare to the previous decade we have more advertising everywhere such as on television shows, internet, newspaper, billboards and many other similar items and container. Some companies being use special ads for selling their product. Hence, now that improving power of advertisement, use prominent people in ads and effort to shows the fact that these items are used by celebrities. In addition to, in each social media are shown advertise with famous person so that this item become popular and earned a great income to the company. However, sometimes advertiser don’t show real and general aspect of goods, which they are show in commercial, owing to using well ¬– known person, citizenship appetence to punches this item. Thus, businesses attain high sale of goods inasmuch as their items have high quality but for use commercial that show renowned person.
Secondly, with excessive of commercial some people tend to shopping new materials which have the same as this things in order to it appear ability of advertising. Since people who stay at home spend most time on the television, they attend to deal modern product. After watching several times, advertise make sense to looker on needs these good so that viewer provoke to buy it. For the sake of providing several things, most society convert to materialist. For example, one of my classmate always watch commercial from internet and television. Consequently, watching these advertisements creates great interest in certain goods hence she tends to consume them; therefore, she always waste money for buy things that she has the same as these goods.
Based on what was discussed, I think that is true power of advertising make people buy new things. Commercial not only pursued people to buy fresh goods but also make materialist in society. Also, advertisement can improve efficiency of company.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 106, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ng new materials which have the same as this things in order to it appear ability of...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, hence, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, i think, in addition, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1950.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 373.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22788203753 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69319729592 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.597855227882 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 612.0 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.7098101117 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.5 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.65 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.65 5.45110844103 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196964149149 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0563096319687 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0382918129214 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11732260558 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0116621697374 0.0645574589148 18% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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