A/D : The most important investment that can be made to the education of children aged four to seven is giving them a computer.
The computer is a great invention in the 21st world. Some people think the computer is the best investment for children of education, such others believe that the computer will hurt children if parents let them use the electric device too early. In my perspectives, I support that the computer is not a good way to educate children aged four to seven. I will explore the reasons in the following essay.
First of all, although the computer is mentally stimulating, children need to get moving. Physical activity is the key to children growth. According to some researches, children wish enough exercise will have greater the rate of muscle in their bodies and stronger density of the structure of the born than those who have not enough activities children. This two key points will profoundly affect children's tall and healthy. Thus, there is why let children sit in front of computers is not the right decision.
Instead of using the computer to educate children, teaching them through their sensors is a much wonderful method to make them learn by themselves. For example, babies will use their mouth, hands, and eyes to learn the world, and it is the most basic and efficient manner to explore the world and also the learner's mind. While children are between four to seven, we should still keep them using such way to get used to the world. It is because the computer is only using the vision to access the information, but if we only use the vision, we totally waste other sensors, which are our innate talent. Moreover, it will make children have no chance to develop their other gifts.
Third, watching the computer in a long time will harm children's eyes. Children's eyes are much fragile than we thought and they are easy to get hurt because of the blue light, which emits by the computers. The blue is a specific frequency wave of light in the spectrum that will influences human's eyes when we receive this light in too much long time. In the beginning, it will decrease the ability of the function of the eyes, and then if we still not notice this effect, it will start causing some diseases. As a result, people may have to cast much money to cure eyes, but most time it cannot be fully recovered. Based on this influence, we least want to see children get sick when they are so young. Therefore, parents should avoid it.
To sum up, there is no doubt that the computer must have some excellent benefit to people. However, I am of the opinion that it is not very suitable for young children, especially when they are growing.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 642, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[3]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'we the least'.
Suggestion: we the least
...lly recovered. Based on this influence, we least want to see children get sick when they...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, then, therefore, third, thus, while, for example, no doubt, as a result, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2102.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 449.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68151447661 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39118159409 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505567928731 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 630.9 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.1467903556 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.3913043478 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5217391304 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.65217391304 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171591732236 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0529301569643 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.060170616772 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0972512826727 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0545454564582 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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