Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is no shortage of debatable about whether the opinion of celebrities has a direct influence on younger people than older people. In my opinion, famous entertainers and athletes play a key role in the opinions of younger people. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, younger adults have direct and very closely interacts with celebrities. It would not be too great an exaggeration to say that nowadays, due to social network and increasing public event, many young people spend a large amount of time to follow famous actors and athletes. many children and younger people try to imitate celebrities, and younger have changed their lifestyle because of actors' big influence on young people lives. For example, in my city, there is a group of students that behave and speak exactly with the same way of on famous actor in my city. Recently, they have started to buy clothes from this famous actor stores. In other words, young people like to have a successful life like this actor. There are no doubt many more example, but this is one story that clearly shows the famous actors and athletes can change the lives of the young.
Secondly, famous athletes and actors organize some area to meet with young people. To clarify, athletes want to learn their ability and knowledge about sports to young people. For instance, my brother is a famous athlete in the city, he built a gym to gather young people in this place in order to learn this younger how they can gain success in some sportive area. broadly speaking, young people have started to have a healthy life. All in all, the role that plays famous people in educating younger life is enormous.
I conclusion, I strongly believe that renown actors and successful athletes play a crucial role to affect young people opinions. This is because nowadays the life of famous people are accessible than past, and because famous people try to spend much time between young people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, secondly, so, broadly speaking, for example, for instance, i feel, no doubt, first of all, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1660.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 342.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85380116959 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49136534229 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.502923976608 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 519.3 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.771231626 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.6470588235 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1176470588 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.47058823529 5.45110844103 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209448612338 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0803673609637 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0517586516888 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150626510664 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0454186967608 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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