Your office building doesn't have parking available.Write a letter to the manager. In your letter:Explain the problemSuggest a solutionSay why parking will benefit all employees

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Your office building doesn't have parking available.
Write a letter to the manager. In your letter:
Explain the problem
Suggest a solution
Say why parking will benefit all employees

Dear Sir,
I am writing this epistle in regards to highlight the problems caused by the unavailability of parking space in our office building and would offer a valuable solution to resolve this issue. Let me explain in detail.

As you are aware most of the employees commute to office by their own conveyance which they park along the roadside which creates a massive traffic jam. Additionally, as the vehicles are parked outside many valuable items like laptops, DVD players have been stolen in the past. Despite our requests to the security team at the main gate to keep a watch over the vehicles, such incidents are happening on a regular basis.

Hence I would request you to arrange to park in the open space available at the backyard of the office with 24 hours security as it will not only ensure safety for the vehicles but also protect the valuable items kept inside the vehicle. Additionally, such a move would be beneficial for all the employees as it will provide them peace of mind consequently it will increase employee efficiency at work.
I hope my suggestion will be accepted.
Yours sincerely
Ben

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir, I am writing this epistle in regards to ...
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Line 2, column 27, Rule ID: IN_REGARD_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'regarding' or 'with regard to'.
Suggestion: regarding; with regard to
Dear Sir, I am writing this epistle in regards to highlight the problems caused by the un...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...is issue. Let me explain in detail. As you are aware most of the employees com...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...ts are happening on a regular basis. Hence I would request you to arrange to park ...
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Line 8, column 16, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tion will be accepted. Yours sincerely Ben
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, hence, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 5.05154639175 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 32.9175257732 55% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 26.3917525773 114% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 935.0 937.175257732 100% => OK
No of words: 193.0 206.0 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84455958549 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.72725689877 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63305234345 2.54303337028 104% => OK
Unique words: 126.0 127.690721649 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.652849740933 0.622605031667 105% => OK
syllable_count: 298.8 290.88556701 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.13402061856 33% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.0522004741 44.8134815571 165% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.888888889 76.5299724578 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4444444444 16.8248392259 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.77777777778 4.34317383033 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194315107857 0.216113520407 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0732171492913 0.0766984524023 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0354745590627 0.0603063233224 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0917357620658 0.12726935374 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0307184356129 0.0580467560999 53% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 8.37731958763 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 70.7449484536 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 8.71597938144 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 7.59969072165 109% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 41.2886597938 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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