Your office building doesn't have parking available. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter:Explain the problemSuggest a solutionSay why parking will benefit all employees

Dear Mr. Thompson,

I am writing regarding the issue with absence of parking places for our co-workers.

However, our building is not so big, only five flours, it accommodate more than 450 staff including management. Moreover, more than sixty per cents of those people has a personal vehicle, so the lack of free space, around the building to park a car, is a common problem for all of us. Therefore, I decided to take an action and to raise a question about possibility to arrange a separate parking lot, only for the employees of the company.

Furthermore, we already have an empty piece of land, close to the office, to establish a parking pavilion. According to information that I found, it has a reasonable price, so our company can afford it.

In this respect, I think that it would be beneficial not only for those, who work in the building, but also for the customers. Because, there will be no need any more to search for an empty space along the road and to walk long meters back to the office.

I hope that you will consider my recommendation about a new parking lot. Please let me know I you need further information regarding this matter.

Yours sincerely,

Angela Tinley.

Votes
Average: 8.1 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 59, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'accommodates'?
Suggestion: accommodates
...ing is not so big, only five flours, it accommodate more than 450 staff including managemen...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, moreover, regarding, so, therefore, i think

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 32.9175257732 82% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 26.3917525773 95% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 999.0 937.175257732 107% => OK
No of words: 210.0 206.0 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75714285714 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80675409584 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69192544195 2.54303337028 106% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 127.690721649 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.652380952381 0.622605031667 105% => OK
syllable_count: 310.5 290.88556701 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 1.44329896907 277% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.0971474255 44.8134815571 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.8181818182 76.5299724578 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0909090909 16.8248392259 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.90909090909 4.34317383033 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14108219608 0.216113520407 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0530240209422 0.0766984524023 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0412288179967 0.0603063233224 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0668823733442 0.12726935374 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0300781682149 0.0580467560999 52% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 8.37731958763 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 70.7449484536 86% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 8.71597938144 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 7.59969072165 102% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 41.2886597938 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 81.4606741573 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.25 Out of 9
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