Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer?
It is generally agreed today that parents should spend time with their children, yet most of the parents are busy with their work and not have much free time. While some people believe that these parents should spend their free time with their children by playing games or sports, others hold the view that they should help children in doing schoolwork. Among the two opinions, I agree with the former one. In what follows, I elaborate on my viewpoint.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that children should have a good sense about their parents to have a good relationship. Children of busy parents endanger of being alone most of their time in the home. So, they should be protected from the harmful effects of depression. Therefore, parents must have a close relationship with their children. Playing games or sports is an appropriate way for parents to establish this relationship with each other. Take a personal experience as an example; when I was a young boy, my father has come late at night to the home. We have spoken rarely to each other. One day, my father enrolled himself and me in a gym, and after that, we have gone to the gym at weekends. It made me count on my father and tell him some of my problems and take pieces of advice. Had we not gone to the gym, I would not have spoken to him about my issues.
Another equally noteworthy point in corroborating my stance is that it is healthier for both children and parents. Today people should prevent from harmful effects of sedentary life. Also, children face many problems and disease with overeating and obesity. In addition, busy parents have little time for practicing and exercising. So, Parents should schedule their family time to become an active family. Thus, those short free times are good opportunities for parents to gather their family member and exercise. The more practice, the healthier life. For the purpose of illustration, my son has overweight. After consulting with the doctor, my wife and I take a decision to play volleyball one hour per day with our son. Definitely, it has an excellent result on his body, and his weight is declining.
In brief, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that playing games or sports are the best way for parents to spend their time with their children. All in all, it is highly recommended that a poll be conducted to assess what other long-term impacts it may have on the children's personality.
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- Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to s 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 586, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, may, so, therefore, thus, while, in addition, in brief
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2042.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 426.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79342723005 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61162868292 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492957746479 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 625.5 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.9664985446 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.5384615385 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3846153846 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.73076923077 5.45110844103 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.369331133112 0.236089414692 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0966921197184 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102461860235 0.0737576698707 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.249629688388 0.150856017488 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.087038350622 0.0645574589148 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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