The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Nowadays, young people are being competetive rather than being cooperative. It is because of the way young people are being educated or directed from their learning days. Young people are often subjected to competetion in studies, sports and there is a lack of teaching that instills cooperation between them. But it is not true that young people need to be more cooperative than being competetive. This statement is misleading, because competetion is different from cooperation by defention. Cooperation builds a bond between people which helps in moving forward together, but competition makes a person to go beyond his limits to succeed there by causing him/her to improve. Both cooperation and competition have their own set of advantages which improves an individual as per his/her working industry. One cannot be discarded as superior over other.
In some scenarios, competition will be helpful to a person improve individually and to move forward. Let us take an example of a people in leadership position in industry that provides services to society. In this case being competitve helps the leaders. It helps the leaders by making them to go beyond their limits, make intellegent decisions to compete with one another. By doing so it not only improves the leaders individually it also provides better services to the society. So being competitive in this case helps both to the individual and the society. Being cooperative in this case cannot be an improvement to an individual or society as the development will not be as good as with the develpoment made by competition between them.
In some cases cooperation helps in creating a better environment, For example consider a situation of governement where people need to be cooperative for making a scoeity a better place. If people start being competitive in this role it not only hinders the people from moving forward but also effects the socity being a better place
In coclusion, instilling cooperation instead of compeition cannot be helpful for young people in all leadership roles. Both cooperation and competition have their own set of advtanges depending up on the leadership roles. Cooperation might be helpful in roles where people need to move forward together and competition will be useful where people need to move forward indivuallly by improving themselves independently. So, it's better to make young people know the importance of both and make them learn how to get benfited by them.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'cases'' or 'case's'?
Suggestion: cases'; case's
...by competition between them. In some cases cooperation helps in creating a better ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, still, for example, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 12.9106741573 209% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2078.0 2235.4752809 93% => OK
No of words: 399.0 442.535393258 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20802005013 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95994537537 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 215.323595506 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.441102756892 0.4932671777 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 657.0 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 54.2930934834 60.3974514979 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.9 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.95 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.6 5.21951772744 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154710114609 0.243740707755 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.055761465557 0.0831039109588 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.05103594397 0.0758088955206 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113635098746 0.150359130593 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0484591029526 0.0667264976115 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 100.480337079 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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