The chart below shows the amount of money per week spent on fast foods in Britain. The graph shows the trends in consumption of fast foods. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. (RE-WRITE 2)
Given is the bar chart of the weekly-spending changes on three types of fast food by Britons. In the same time, the line graph shows the consumption of fast foods during 20 years, from 1970 to 1990.
According to the data, high earners are more likely to eat Hamburgers. Average earners also ate this previous food, while there was an increase of 25-pence spending for eating more Fish & Chips. In the review of low earners, Pizza came as the favorable menu, which was 8 pence of expenditure, but this spending was more twice smaller than Fish & Chips which were slightly larger than Hamburgers, which were almost 15 pence per person per week.
A more detailed look at the line graph shows both Hamburgers and Pizza rose steadily to 300 grammes during a 15-year period, while Fish & Chips declined slightly from 300 to nearly 200 grammes. After 1985 onwards, Hamburger continuously increased over 500 grammes, while Pizza had almost 300 grammes. In contrast to Hamburgers and Pizza rising remarkably, Fish & Chips remained reasonably steady, and continued to increase slightly over 200 grammes towards the end of the year.
Overall, the preference of eating fast foods for Britons shows notable changes during a period of 20 years, between 1970 and 1990.
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this spending was more twice smaller than Fish & Chips
this spending was twice smaller than that of Fish & Chips
better: fish and chips were twice as popular as burgers
which was 8 pence of expenditure, but this spending was more twice smaller than Fish & Chips which were slightly larger than Hamburgers, which were almost 15 pence per person per week.
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