Local in your community wants to close down the sports and relaxation centre due to lack of funds.

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Local in your community wants to close down the sports and relaxation centre due to lack of funds.

Submitted by ife bajo on Thu, 06/06/2019 - 09:30

Dear sir or madam,

I am writing to you in connection with the proposed closing down of the sports and relaxation centre in Birmingham. I am imploring you, to please reconsider your decision for the benefits of the community. My father and I use the facilities at the sports centre to keep fit and my grandparents also use the place for their dance training which keeps the agile and healthy, it is also a place where they meet up with their friends. My sister, Sarah, also use the swimming facilities to practice for the next Olympic competition in which she is representing United Kingdom.

Needless to say, the news to close down this facilities came as a shock to us because we have just two of this type of centre and the entire community depends solely on them. We are a community of over 10,000 and we are actually hoping to have more of such centres and not have it reduced. For instance, children often gather to play here in the evenings, adults too use this facilities for different purposes and the teenagers use the indoor games facilities to keep them busy and fit.

However, I am of the opinion that if this centre is shutdown it will have a negative impact on the teens because they will be idle and may increase their chances of engaging in bad malpractices. The community as whole will be sad and may have a setback on their health as many people live a sedentary lifestyles.

I am hoping you will reconsider your decisions, if money is the only issue as the advantaged it provides far outweighs finance.

Yours sincerely,

Jason Peter.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 364, Rule ID: TOO_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'to use'?
Suggestion: to use
...er to play here in the evenings, adults too use this facilities for different purposes ...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 372, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ay here in the evenings, adults too use this facilities for different purposes and t...
^^^^
Line 7, column 302, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'lifestyle'?
Suggestion: lifestyle
... health as many people live a sedentary lifestyles. I am hoping you will reconsider you...
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, however, if, may, so, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 5.05154639175 238% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 32.9175257732 109% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 26.3917525773 125% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1295.0 937.175257732 138% => OK
No of words: 278.0 206.0 135% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65827338129 4.54256449028 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 3.78020617076 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62257846587 2.54303337028 103% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 127.690721649 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553956834532 0.622605031667 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 415.8 290.88556701 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 16.3608247423 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.1453784708 44.8134815571 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.727272727 76.5299724578 154% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2727272727 16.8248392259 150% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.54545454545 4.34317383033 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159433220861 0.216113520407 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.065687466636 0.0766984524023 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.063466341979 0.0603063233224 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0780052902895 0.12726935374 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0384721057926 0.0580467560999 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 8.37731958763 158% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 70.7449484536 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 7.45979381443 160% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 8.71597938144 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 7.59969072165 109% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 41.2886597938 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 8.62886597938 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 8.54432989691 140% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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