The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The editor claims here, Balmer island will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents by reducing the moped rented form 50 per day to 25 per day.Narrated in this way ,the argument distorts the view of the situation by manupulating facts & provided poor reasoning.In support of this recommendation the author reasons the the neighbor island of seaville achieved success of reduce the accident rates by reducing the number of rented moped.However,careful scrutiny view of this evidence reveals that it gives little credible support to the authors recommendations. Hence the argument can be considerd unsubstantiated.
First of all,the argument readily assumes that the reduction of the moped can reduce the rate of accidents. This is an assumptions which dont have such solid grounds. Because here the author did not give any certain cause why those accidents were happended.Without he finding the cause of accidents , going to action is just a childish decions.It can be happend the accidents are happend because of other transportation or it can be happen that the people of the island are not aware of the traffic rules. Beside this the author did not clarify about the road conditon where the vehicle & which can be major cause of the accidents.hence the argument would have been much more convinving if the author specifically stated about this information.
Again ,the argument readily assumes that the population of the Balmar island is equal to seavile island,so that applying the same action will not have a negative effect. But the author fails to look up the point that , the popilation of Balmar island increased to 100,000 in summer & their favourite trasport is mapod. If the mapod number is suddenly reduced what happendto this extra population's transportation system? The people will suffer if mapod number are reduced.So thinkiong the about population the author corelate the two island with same resolution which is actaully totally inconvinving.
Fianlly, the author did not give a sustainable resolution about the mapod companies.If a sudden decrease come to their rent,the will face loss in their business which can decry them against the council. Also the author did not tell about What will happened to the extra mapods ? In additon he did not clearly mention about the reduction number of mapod in the neighbor island.Without giving that percentage why he decided to speicificlly reduce the number 50 to 25?Without convincing answer to this question the reader is left with an impression that the claim made by the author are more wishful thinker rather than a substantive evidence.
In epilogue , the author argument is unpersuasive.To bolser it further the must provide some concrete evidence about the cause of choosing the number of reduction . Fianlly to better asses the argument, the author must find the cause of the accidents first.
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Sentence: By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals.'
Description: A noun, singular, common is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to percent and annual
Sentence: The editor claims here, Balmer island will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents by reducing the moped rented form 50 per day to 25 per day.Narrated in this way ,the argument distorts the view of the situation by manupulating facts & provided poor reasoning.In support of this recommendation the author reasons the the neighbor island of seaville achieved success of reduce the accident rates by reducing the number of rented moped.However,careful scrutiny view of this
Description: A noun, singular, common is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to percent and annual
Description: A determiner/pronoun, singular is not usually followed by an End of sentence
Suggestion: Refer to this
Description: The token the is not usually followed by an article
Suggestion: Refer to the and the
Description: The token of is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to of and reduce
Sentence: evidence reveals that it gives little credible support to the authors recommendations.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to authors and recommendations
Sentence: Because here the author did not give any certain cause why those accidents were happended.Without he finding the cause of accidents , going to action is just a childish decions.It can be happend the accidents are happend because of other transportation or it can be happen that the people of the island are not aware of the traffic rules.
Description: The fragment happend because of is not usually preceded by are
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace are with is
Sentence: Beside this the author did not clarify about the road conditon where the vehicle & which can be major cause of the accidents.hence the argument would have been much more convinving if the author specifically stated about this information.
Description: The tag a determiner/pronoun, singular is not usually followed by the
Suggestion: Refer to this and the
Description: The fragment the accidents.hence the is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace accidents.hence with adjective
Sentence: The people will suffer if mapod number are reduced.So thinkiong the about population the author corelate the two island with same resolution which is actaully totally inconvinving.
Description: The tag an adjective is not usually followed by the
Suggestion: Refer to thinkiong and the
Description: The fragment author corelate the is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace corelate with verb, past tense
Sentence: Fianlly, the author did not give a sustainable resolution about the mapod companies.If a sudden decrease come to their rent,the will face loss in their business which can decry them against the council.
Description: The word will is not usually used as a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to will
Sentence: Also the author did not tell about What will happened to the extra mapods ?
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by a verb, past participle
Suggestion: Refer to will and happened
Sentence: In epilogue , the author argument is unpersuasive.To bolser it further the must provide some concrete evidence about the cause of choosing the number of reduction .
Description: The token the is not usually followed by a modal auxillary
Suggestion: Refer to the and must
Sentence: 'On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months.
Error: summer Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season.
Error: summer Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: The editor claims here, Balmer island will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents by reducing the moped rented form 50 per day to 25 per day.Narrated in this way ,the argument distorts the view of the situation by manupulating facts & provided poor reasoning.In support of this recommendation the author reasons the the neighbor island of seaville achieved success of reduce the accident rates by reducing the number of rented moped.However,careful scrutiny view of this
Error: manupulating Suggestion: manipulating
Error: seaville Suggestion: servile
Sentence: Hence the argument can be considerd unsubstantiated.
Error: unsubstantiated Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: considerd Suggestion: consider
Sentence: This is an assumptions which dont have such solid grounds.
Error: dont Suggestion: don
Sentence: Because here the author did not give any certain cause why those accidents were happended.Without he finding the cause of accidents , going to action is just a childish decions.It can be happend the accidents are happend because of other transportation or it can be happen that the people of the island are not aware of the traffic rules.
Error: happend Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: decions Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: happended Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Beside this the author did not clarify about the road conditon where the vehicle & which can be major cause of the accidents.hence the argument would have been much more convinving if the author specifically stated about this information.
Error: accidents.hence Suggestion: accidents hence
Error: convinving Suggestion: convincing
Error: conditon Suggestion: condition
Sentence: Again ,the argument readily assumes that the population of the Balmar island is equal to seavile island,so that applying the same action will not have a negative effect.
Error: seavile Suggestion: servile
Sentence: But the author fails to look up the point that , the popilation of Balmar island increased to 100,000 in summer & their favourite trasport is mapod.
Error: trasport Suggestion: transport
Error: popilation Suggestion: population
Error: summer Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: mapod Suggestion: major
Error: favourite Suggestion: favorite
Sentence: If the mapod number is suddenly reduced what happendto this extra population's transportation system?
Error: happendto Suggestion: happen
Error: mapod Suggestion: major
Sentence: The people will suffer if mapod number are reduced.So thinkiong the about population the author corelate the two island with same resolution which is actaully totally inconvinving.
Error: inconvinving Suggestion: continuing
Error: corelate Suggestion: correlate
Error: thinkiong Suggestion: thinking
Error: actaully Suggestion: actually
Error: mapod Suggestion: major
Sentence: Fianlly, the author did not give a sustainable resolution about the mapod companies.If a sudden decrease come to their rent,the will face loss in their business which can decry them against the council.
Error: decry Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: sustainable Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: mapod Suggestion: major
Sentence: Also the author did not tell about What will happened to the extra mapods ?
Error: mapods Suggestion: maids
Sentence: In additon he did not clearly mention about the reduction number of mapod in the neighbor island.Without giving that percentage why he decided to speicificlly reduce the number 50 to 25?Without convincing answer to this question the reader is left with an impression that the claim made by the author are more wishful thinker rather than a substantive evidence.
Error: mapod Suggestion: major
Error: additon Suggestion: addition
Error: speicificlly Suggestion: specifically
Sentence: In epilogue , the author argument is unpersuasive.To bolser it further the must provide some concrete evidence about the cause of choosing the number of reduction .
Error: bolser Suggestion: bolder
Error: unpersuasive Suggestion: No alternate word
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 14 2
Read a good grammar book.
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 635 350
No. of Characters: 3164 1500
No. of Different Words: 284 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 5.02 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.983 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.651 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 253 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 165 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 107 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 61 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.864 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 18.351 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.313 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.631 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.156 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 8 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 361, Rule ID: THE_FALL_SEASON[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...es from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the...
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Line 7, column 38, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... The editor claims here, Balmer island will attain the 50 percent annual reduct...
^^
Line 7, column 162, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Narrated
...ed rented form 50 per day to 25 per day.Narrated in this way ,the argument distorts the ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 182, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...r day to 25 per day.Narrated in this way ,the argument distorts the view of the si...
^^
Line 7, column 280, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...ulating facts & provided poor reasoning.In support of this recommendation the aut...
^^
Line 7, column 317, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ng.In support of this recommendation the author reasons the the neighbor island o...
^^
Line 7, column 334, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...this recommendation the author reasons the the neighbor island of seaville achieved su...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 334, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...this recommendation the author reasons the the neighbor island of seaville achieved su...
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Line 7, column 386, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hbor island of seaville achieved success of reduce the accident rates by reducing...
^^
Line 7, column 456, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: However
... by reducing the number of rented moped.However,careful scrutiny view of this evidence ...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 463, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , careful
...ucing the number of rented moped.However,careful scrutiny view of this evidence reveals ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 581, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...support to the authors recommendations. Hence the argument can be considerd unsubstan...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 13, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...nsiderd unsubstantiated. First of all,the argument readily assumes that the reduc...
^^^^
Line 9, column 117, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an assumption' or simply 'assumptions'?
Suggestion: an assumption; assumptions
...n reduce the rate of accidents. This is an assumptions which dont have such solid grounds. Bec...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 138, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...accidents. This is an assumptions which dont have such solid grounds. Because here t...
^^^^
Line 9, column 258, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Without
...ause why those accidents were happended.Without he finding the cause of accidents , goi...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 258, Rule ID: HE_THE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Without the finding'?
Suggestion: Without the finding
...ause why those accidents were happended.Without he finding the cause of accidents , going to actio...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 299, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ithout he finding the cause of accidents , going to action is just a childish deci...
^^
Line 9, column 345, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: It
...ng to action is just a childish decions.It can be happend the accidents are happen...
^^
Line 11, column 6, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... stated about this information. Again ,the argument readily assumes that the po...
^^
Line 11, column 104, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , so
...Balmar island is equal to seavile island,so that applying the same action will not ...
^^^
Line 11, column 217, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...e author fails to look up the point that , the popilation of Balmar island increas...
^^
Line 11, column 300, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d to 100,000 in summer & their favourite trasport is mapod. If the mapod number i...
^^
Line 11, column 387, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'populations'' or 'population's'?
Suggestion: populations'; population's
...denly reduced what happendto this extra populations transportation system? The people will ...
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Line 11, column 473, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: So
...will suffer if mapod number are reduced.So thinkiong the about population the auth...
^^
Line 13, column 85, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: If
...le resolution about the mapod companies.If a sudden decrease come to their rent,th...
^^
Line 13, column 124, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
....If a sudden decrease come to their rent,the will face loss in their business which ...
^^^^
Line 13, column 204, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ich can decry them against the council. Also the author did not tell about What will...
^^^^
Line 13, column 249, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'happen'
Suggestion: happen
...the author did not tell about What will happened to the extra mapods ? In additon he did...
^^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 377, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Without
... number of mapod in the neighbor island.Without giving that percentage why he decided t...
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Line 13, column 466, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Without
...speicificlly reduce the number 50 to 25?Without convincing answer to this question the ...
^^^^^^^
Line 15, column 12, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...n a substantive evidence. In epilogue , the author argument is unpersuasive.To ...
^^
Line 15, column 51, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: To
...e , the author argument is unpersuasive.To bolser it further the must provide some...
^^
Line 15, column 163, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ause of choosing the number of reduction . Fianlly to better asses the argument, t...
^^
Line 15, column 207, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ianlly to better asses the argument, the author must find the cause of the accide...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, look, so, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 89.0 55.5748502994 160% => OK
Nominalization: 31.0 16.3942115768 189% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3252.0 2260.96107784 144% => OK
No of words: 621.0 441.139720559 141% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23671497585 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.991980728 4.56307096286 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94006854052 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 290.0 204.123752495 142% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.466988727858 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 1002.6 705.55239521 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.22255489022 261% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 31.0 22.8473053892 136% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 134.710977652 57.8364921388 233% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 162.6 119.503703932 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.05 23.324526521 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.70786347227 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 8.0 5.15768463074 155% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 35.0 5.25449101796 666% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.88822355289 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.333015307609 0.218282227539 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119817237824 0.0743258471296 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.170808341822 0.0701772020484 243% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177311626344 0.128457276422 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.173422911156 0.0628817314937 276% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.8 14.3799401198 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 48.3550499002 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.197005988 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.5979740519 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.32208582834 109% => OK
difficult_words: 154.0 98.500998004 156% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.1389221557 129% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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