Society should make efforts to save endangered species only if the potential extinction of those species is the result of human activities.
Over 99 percent of species are extinct during the course of time between the commencement of the unicellular organism to present mammal dominated era. Extinction of species is commonplace given the nature of evolution and natural selection. Here, the prompt advocates that we must protect the species, whom we have directly effected to the extend that they are in verge of extinction. However, in my view it is futile to protect any so-called " endangered species" whether their extinction is caused by us or by other environmental factor. I will defend my theis based on three arguments and present my arguments as persuasive as possible by providing various evidences to support my thesis.
Firstly, we should not be ashamed of changing the environment as per our need of survival. Every organism in the ecosystem alters the environment and it is pivotal for us, as it helps us to survive and thrive in long run. Admittedly, we alter the sorrounding far more than that of other organism and also destryed various species due to industralization, infrastructure development and agriculture; however, we are also the part of the ecosystem and we have every right to do so as other beings have.For instance, beaver builds dam on the lake to search for food for survival. It, in turn, destroys whole ecosystem of the lake mainly aquatic ecosystem.So, for survival it is no shame to alter the sorrounding according to need as it is natural part of the ecosystem.
Secondly, extinction is mechanism in which natural selection perish those who do not have survival traits and reward those who are strong and have capability to adapt to the enviornment with the help of their useful triats. This natural process and we have no control over it. Over 99 percent of species in the world are extinct and those which survive today will eventually die out. So the term "endangered species" doesn't have any significance as all living being now are vulnerable to be extinct. In fact, must think of survival of ourself in future rather than spending valuable resources on the species which will die out eventually. For instance, dinosour became extinct after astroid hit earth but other species survive. If similar threat is repeats then we are doomed to be extinct. So we must prepare ourself for those event to occur so that we survive. In doing so we may even protect other species as well.
The opponent of my thesis may argue that extinction of endangered species, whether it is caused by humans or by external factors, holds moral obligation of protecting them. However, why they do not advocate on protecting biodiversity comprising of HIV, ebola and malaria ? They are also part of biodiversity, as are elephants, Bengal tigers, panda and one-horned rhino. In fact, the extinction doesn't actually carry moral significance irrespective of the cause of those extinctions. Those who claim that we have moral significance for protecting "endangered species" are misguided at best and hypocritical at worse.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, well, for instance, in fact, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 33.0505617978 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2561.0 2235.4752809 115% => OK
No of words: 497.0 442.535393258 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15291750503 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0128707043 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 215.323595506 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492957746479 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 815.4 704.065955056 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.3244669705 60.3974514979 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.347826087 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6086956522 23.4991977007 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.30434782609 5.21951772744 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 7.80617977528 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182283949138 0.243740707755 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0614856722976 0.0831039109588 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0510150448569 0.0758088955206 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118832598171 0.150359130593 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0550226753171 0.0667264976115 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.1392134831 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 100.480337079 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.