The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
We live in the 21st century. The world is getting more competitive as each day passes. Most of the current generation is stuck in the rat race to earn more and better their standards of living. Even when we take the job prospects, it is far more competitive than it was in the last decades. The claim states that the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership roles is to instill in them a sense of cooperation and not competition. I believe that the sense of cooperation and the sense of competition are two distinct skills that are not replaceable by one another and is vital in its own ways.
I agree to the claim only to a very limited extent. In this world where we have cut throat competitions and the best positions only reserved for the cream of creams, without having the sense of competition, it is difficult for the young generation to survive. Take the very fundamental case of relative grading that prevail in schools and universities. The students are graded on the comparitive performance of their fellow batch mates. If the students fail to make it to the standards of performance held up by others, or if they don't perform better than their classmates, they will end up with a relatively low grade and gpa. This will affect their prospective careers and even admission to future degree programmes.
One can argue that cooperation and team work is required to excel in any field and that is what the industry actually demands in this era. This is true, but merely having a sense of cooperation and no competition will put one at disadvantage when compared to their counterparts. This might result in adverse consequences in the industrial world, if an employee is found lagging behind in terms of performance when compared with others. Non performance-oriented tasks are minimal. For the most parts, each leadership position in any field requires a sense of competition in some or the other way, so merely instilling young people with a sense of cooperation is not sufficient enough for them to prosper in their fields.
Competition is an inevitable factor in any field. Even if take for example a position in the government of the country. Winning the elections by outperforming other canditates itself is a big competition. With a laid back attitude, no one can gather the votes from the common masses. Only if the candidates can outperform the others and prove to be better representatives, can they stand a chance to win the elections.
Considering the competitive nature of the contemporary era and the performance oriented nature of the industries, I strongly believe that competition is an unavoidable factor in any field. In such a case, rounding up the points, I disagree with the claim stating that a sense of competition should not be instilled in the younger generation. Both the senses of competition and cooperation are vital to the wholesome development of young people and for them to succeed and lead good lives in the future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 532, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...rformance held up by others, or if they dont perform better than their classmates, t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, if, so, still, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 58.6224719101 126% => OK
Nominalization: 28.0 12.9106741573 217% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2483.0 2235.4752809 111% => OK
No of words: 512.0 442.535393258 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.849609375 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75682846001 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98763971361 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 215.323595506 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47265625 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 786.6 704.065955056 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.5817811877 60.3974514979 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.32 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.48 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.64 5.21951772744 31% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293107567061 0.243740707755 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0757403455568 0.0831039109588 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.144203919844 0.0758088955206 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164845340465 0.150359130593 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0749983248933 0.0667264976115 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 100.480337079 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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