Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Advertising is the most important cause of unhealthy eating habits.
By the advent of technology, many companies use tv advertisements to increase the selling rate of their commodities. these advertisements are not only confined to some specific domains. one of the domains which is ubiquitous among all channels is food advertisements. some of them are beneficial for human`s health while some of them are not. Regarding this matter, some people may hold the view that the advertisements are the main factor of an unhealthy diet; however, some others take an opposite viewpoint and believe that there are a list of the factors which have priority over junk food advertisement. From my point of view, I think [Hamed1] that there are plenty of reasons which encourage people to use unhealthy foods. I will elaborate on my viewpoint through two remarkable reasons.
The first reason is that we are living in a world which everyone is busy and has less time to devote to eating. By augment of working stress and the competition which exists among people in working place, people prefer to allot more time to work than any other activity. fast food restaurants are restaurants which fit people`s contemporary lifestyle. they provide cheap foods that will be ready in a short amount of time. In their menus, you can find foods such as pizza, hamburger, etc. these foods are cooked in a high amount of harmful oils, which is deleterious for human`s body. By conserving(serving?) such foods daily, people are getting used to these kinds of unhealthy foods. Moreover, the number of fast food restaurants have been increased dramatically in the recent years and if a person wants to choose a restaurant to eat in without considering any conditions such as lack of time, he or she faces more fast food restaurants than any other type of restaurant, so this may increase the number of the customers of the fast food restaurants. this lack of time may not only lead to using fast foods. many people do not have enough time between waking up and starting of their work hour. this lack of time prevents them from eating breakfast which is one of the most important meals of the day and not eating breakfast can have adverse effects on the human body.
The second reason that I would like to mention is that nowadays being slender and fit is quality/desirable for people. some people consult with nutrition experts while some others go on a diet arbitrarily. some of these diets may lead to an unhealthy eating lifestyle. some of them deprive themselves of eating foods even if they are extremely hungry. being hungry for a long time has negative effects on the human body. Additionally, some of them can not tolerate this situation and start to eat more than the amount that they used to do before starting the diet, and this type of lifestyle can lead to obesity.
Although these are some of the reasons that may cause an unhealthy eating habit and to be more judicious, the effects of the tv advertisements must be mentioned too. As human’s mind is fooled/deceived by appealing images, showing appealing images is a must in the business industry. many restaurants or food companies use tv advertisements to display an attractive image of their foods, and most of them are about fast foods and unhealthy foods such as alcoholic drinks, etc. Thus, a number of people, especially children, are attracted to buying more snacks or eating more junk food like McDonald's. these are all harmful to a person's healthy diet.
In the final analysis, I firmly believe that tv advertisement is one of the reasons for an unhealthy diet, but it may not be the most significant one. many reasons are involved that in the contemporary world, a large amount of people are being attracted to unhealthy foods. these can vary from working stresses and shortage of time to the dominant ideas about the human body`s shape. To prevent people from being attracted to unhealthy foods, advertisements must stop giving misleading information about these types of foods and also public knowledge about healthy lifestyles must be increased.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, second, so, thus, while, i think, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 38.0 15.1003584229 252% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 101.0 52.1666666667 194% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3401.0 1977.66487455 172% => OK
No of words: 685.0 407.700716846 168% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96496350365 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.11590702189 4.48103885553 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89504326522 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 292.0 212.727598566 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.426277372263 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1062.9 618.680645161 172% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 20.6003584229 160% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.5617108656 48.9658058833 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.060606061 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7575757576 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.24242424242 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 5.5376344086 379% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 3.85842293907 337% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121609584292 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0327925910491 0.076458572812 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0371399842433 0.0737576698707 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0792241834533 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0197650221471 0.0645574589148 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 86.8835125448 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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