16- Some people believe that in order for a hobby to be enjoyable, it needs to be difficult in some way. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Once in a while, we have to have enjoyment through things we always like to do to escape from our stressful work, so we do have a certain hobby. However, these habitual things should not be extreme for us to enjoy, because as long as we love what we do and we can afford it, then we will get the pleasure we want to.
For one, as long as we have a fondness of what we like to do regularly, we can achieve enjoy">enjoyment. For instance, my hobby is reading fiction and nonfiction books such as the series novel Harry Potter by J.K. Rowling and the Pretty Little Liars series by Sara Shepard. I really love to read since I was in my preschool age and I do this every weekend or I am not busy at work in the hospital. this is not a very difficult thing to do because I am just sitting on a couch or in my bed while doing this, but I always get the pleasure I wanted.
In addition to this, these books are affordable so it more added to our indulgence. For example, there are preloaded books in Burnham Bookwormers bookstore that is located in Baguio City, Philippines, in which we can purchase a second-hand book for only 10 to 20 pesos, an equivalent of half a us dollar. so it is very cheap. Whereas when we engage to extremely hard hobbies such sky-diving, cycling down a cliff or feeding a shark by our hands like others wanted to do, then we need to have a lot of money to be able to do such things, and we cannot enjoy these if we always think how much money we spent for these dangerous hobbies.
In conclusion, it is always pleasurable to do activities of our great interest and at the same time economical. it does not need to be hard and risky like some would want it to have fun. so I highly recommend enjoying what you like doing as long as you can manage it economically.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, really, second, so, then, whereas, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 52.0 24.0651302605 216% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1458.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 344.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.23837209302 5.12529762239 83% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6950418189 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531976744186 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 469.8 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.293817445 49.4020404114 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.153846154 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4615384615 20.7667163134 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.38461538462 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152673748231 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0612637006104 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0495636496912 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113435150913 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0498206794371 0.056905535591 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.61 12.4159519038 61% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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