Writing Task 2 (an essay)
In many countries around the world young people decide to leave their parents’ home once they finish school. They start living on their own or sharing a home with friends. Do you agree or disagree with this approach? Give your opinion.
it is true that as days are passing in this 21st century adolescents are becoming more and more independent. this is the reason they are nowadays leaving their parents dwelling after finishing their school. some people hold the opinion that it is a positive development; whereas, others have the conflicting views. I disagree with this approach. Here, in the below essay I will try to enunciate on this fact with my perception.
To begin with, people arguing on this statement think that undeniably if children are staying with their guardian they will not learn some basic needs of a life that are beneficial in the near future. For example, if a student is living with his parents; probably, he will not learn the value of money management as every and now then he will approach his parents for the pocket money. Secondly, youngsters will never be interested to learn skills such as cooking, washing clothes or additionally doing home chores if there would be someone to take care of these kinds of work. Finally, no parents will compromise in the studies of their kids even they are interested to take up a part time job that can be helpful them to connect to the professional world. therefore, these people hold the opinion that younger ones will never feel confident, if staying with their parents. By the contrast, others have the conflicting views.
As per them, school age is tender age and leaving their ancestral homes at this age is not good for the younger ones because of couple of reasons. First and foremost, if they are living alone there can be possibility that adolescent may land up doing friendship with wrong friends and may fell pray of drugs and alcohol. Obviously, this kind of friendship may ruin their career goals. Moreover, students taking the advantage of staying alone probably indulge themselves in some kind of a crime to earn easy money for better lifestyle. For instance; nowadays, terrorist lure the youngsters by paying handful amount of money for committing the crimes.
To recapitulate, by looking at the above facts, eventually if students are living with their parents they will only lack some basic qualities that can be learnt later. However, living independently may encourage them to indulge in crime world that can be more dangerous in terms of their future. therefore, I oppose this fact that young people leave their parents home immediately after finishing school.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, whereas, for example, for instance, kind of, such as, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 24.0651302605 204% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2018.0 1615.20841683 125% => OK
No of words: 406.0 315.596192385 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97044334975 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5808765148 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51724137931 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 612.0 506.74238477 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.9157848488 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.210526316 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3684210526 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.15789473684 7.06120827912 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.9879759519 276% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.310367907104 0.244688304435 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106628531194 0.084324248473 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0911366322243 0.0667982634062 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213410411462 0.151304729494 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0596224216176 0.056905535591 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.