Do you agree that it is better to work for the business owned by someone else than to work for the business of one's own family?
Without a shadow of a doubt, a job has played a prominent role in every individual's life. And people have been recognized with their jobs. Everybody likes to has his own business instead of working as a member of another company. Many families have their own business, and their members work for it. The controversial question which arises here is whether work for the business owned by someone else is better or for the family's business. I firmly believe that working for the company owned by someone else is better and can be more beneficial. There are numerous reasons, two of which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
The first reason coming to my mind is that working for others not only helps us to be more social, but also makes us ready for future endeavors. When a person works in someone else's business, he has to communicate with unknown people, and he must find friends. So it helps him to improve his social skills. Also When he works in other business, he should go out of the family's environment. So he must be an independent person and stand on his feet because he always does not have family protection. In this way, he can learn how to face problems lonely. A famous Persian proverb says," the more difficult, the more knowledge about life." So it helps him to be ready for the future, and how overcomes his problems. For the purpose of illustration, My cousin left our family business when he was eighteen years old and said that I want to be independent. Now he is geat and social man in our family and solves many family's problems with his connections and knowledge.
Furthermore, one should not neglect the fact that it can help people to start their businesses or help to change or improve their family businesses. When a person works for others, he learns many different things that maybe not find in his family. Moreover, he will know about other company, and their challenges and solutions. It can help him to be more aware of society and its opportunities. So he can start his business or support his family business. One great businessman says, when you want to start a business, at first you should learn how to follow orders. If we're going to discuss details, we figure out that follow orders helps us to find how to lead a group, and find out fundamental problems in a business.
In conclusion, working for other business instead of working for our family business is a challenging and fundamental issue. And there are many opinions about it. We must work for another business because it helps us to be more social and start our business or support family's business. It highly recommended, at earlier years of our job life, we must work for others to learn how to work for ours.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: have
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Suggestion: Also,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, as to, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2253.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 483.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66459627329 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60543685508 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.438923395445 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 705.6 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.1704842583 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.4444444444 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8888888889 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.74074074074 5.45110844103 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.367860246896 0.236089414692 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115709646553 0.076458572812 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.132653706954 0.0737576698707 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.276492453423 0.150856017488 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.137687299044 0.0645574589148 213% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.45 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.16 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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