You are a university student living in on-campus accommodation. You are having some
problems with the internet connection in your room.
Write to the supervisor of your residence. In your letter
Introduce yourself
Inform him / her of the situation
Request that the problem be fixed
Dear Mr Hariss,
I am Paria Oloumi – a recently arrival overseas student staying in Unit 5 of Flower . While I have found all the facilities quite satisfactory thus far, I wish to lodge a complain about university’s internet system.According to student accommodation brochure, which motivated me to book this room, indicated that I would have unlimited internet access. Furthermore, some communication's programs like whatsapp messenger are not working properly. I discussed this demeanor to some of my friends who informed me those applications are blocked by university.
As you are entirely aware, the international phone calls are incredibly expensive in comparison with online calls.Considering the high tuition fees we overseas student already pay, I feel It’s unreasonable to prevent us from using these applications which are more affordable to communicate with loved ones at home .I was, therefore, wondering if you could unblock these programs? Your assistance in this matter is greatly appreciated.
Yours Sincerely,
Paria Oloumi
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Mr Hariss, I am Paria Oloumi – a recent...
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Line 5, column 33, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('recently') instead an adjective, or a noun ('arrival') instead of another adjective.
... I am Paria Oloumi – a recently arrival overseas student staying in Unit 5 of F...
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Line 5, column 96, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...seas student staying in Unit 5 of Flower . While I have found all the facilities q...
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Line 5, column 182, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... satisfactory thus far, I wish to lodge a complain about university's internet system...
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Line 5, column 233, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: According
...about university's internet system.According to student accommodation brochure, whic...
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Line 7, column 115, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Considering
...pensive in comparison with online calls.Considering the high tuition fees we overseas stude...
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Line 7, column 320, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...e to communicate with loved ones at home .I was, therefore, wondering if you could...
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Line 7, column 322, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: I
...to communicate with loved ones at home .I was, therefore, wondering if you could ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, so, therefore, thus, while, i feel
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 0.0 5.05154639175 0% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 32.9175257732 73% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 26.3917525773 72% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 908.0 937.175257732 97% => OK
No of words: 158.0 206.0 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.74683544304 4.54256449028 127% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.54539209256 3.78020617076 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.45886791538 2.54303337028 136% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 127.690721649 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.778481012658 0.622605031667 125% => OK
syllable_count: 292.5 290.88556701 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.41237113402 135% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 12.6804123711 55% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 16.3608247423 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 119.133093125 44.8134815571 266% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 129.714285714 76.5299724578 169% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5714285714 16.8248392259 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.28571428571 4.34317383033 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 2.0 4.29896907216 47% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 2.54639175258 314% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183198055424 0.216113520407 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0744719645525 0.0766984524023 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.053156663415 0.0603063233224 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115773153682 0.12726935374 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0177396730197 0.0580467560999 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 8.37731958763 202% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 23.77 70.7449484536 34% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 3.82989690722 339% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 7.45979381443 206% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 16.37 8.71597938144 188% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.62 7.59969072165 140% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 41.2886597938 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 8.62886597938 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 8.54432989691 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 8.15463917526 159% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.