The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition
The role of a leader is multiferous. A good leader is a mentor, friend and an excellent decision maker. A company is bound to fail if the leader lacks a sense of cooperation and the passion for healthy competetion. Whether competetion is a boon or a bane is a heavily debated topic among business experts. Sometimes competetion leads to many unfair practices but healthy competetion benefits the leaders and consumers alike. I believe that, in order to produce good leaders, society must instill a sense of healthy competition among young people. The ability to accomodate and cooperate is also necessary trait of a good leader.
In this highly competitive world, good leadership is extremely crucial to ensure success, be it in government or in business. Cut throat competetion in any field pushes us to do more. For instance, a student who scored second highest in class will try to score highest inthe next exam. Also, the student who scored the highest will try to retain her position. In this case, competetion benefits both the students because it drives them to study harder and be successful. Cold war was a period of intense tensions between USSR and USA. The spacce race during this period was probably the most remarkable time in the space technology. USSR sent the first person to the space while US was the first country to send a man to the moon. Today, we credit many technological innovations to this intense competetion among the two superpowers.
Most of the top businesses have very competitive leaders. The infamous drift between Steve Jobs and Bill Gates is not obscure in the tech world. The intense competetion among the two companies-Apple and Microsoft lead to many technological innovations in the field of computer technology. The consumers benefited from this internse competetion in the form of incresed jobs, competitive prices of the product and novel devies that made thier life more convenient and esay.
Society has constantly thrived to produce good leaders. We have seen many leaders who insisted that cooperation is necessary to sucess.The leasers like Mahatma Gandhi, Martin Luther King had supoort of millions of people because they believed in taking the whole community forward. Today, the times have changed. In this capitalist world, a leader without competitive temperamnet will find it very difficult to succeed. Therefore, it necessary to instill a sense of healthy competetion among the young leaders.
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- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition 50
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, still, therefore, while, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2064.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 400.0 442.535393258 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85425559472 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 657.9 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 13.0 4.99550561798 260% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.1894015127 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.56 118.986275619 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 23.4991977007 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.84 5.21951772744 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.120923896758 0.243740707755 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0317307264684 0.0831039109588 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0435860716699 0.0758088955206 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0722805336128 0.150359130593 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0207801609534 0.0667264976115 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 14.1392134831 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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