TPO-17:Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
traveling is one of the most critical concerns of our modern society. Needless to say that according to enhance the human walfare in modern society, travel plays an essential role. some people may hold the view that traveling in a group by tour leader is the best way to travel whereas others would take the reverse concept. Even though some people utilize travel individualy since they believe it isn't crucial to be in a group and follow by guid. Nevertheless, I firmly of the belief that traviling in a group is infinitely preferable for me. The following underlying reasons are going to substantiate my standpoints.
The first fact that holds me this concept is that appropriate order and assortion which is consequence of group activities. it can be illustrated that everywhere people work in a group, they did better and greater. The best way to pervent from wasting time is becoming in the suitable order. For example, when I was persuading my family business at the bakery equipment distribution company a few years ago, I decided to bring my co-worker to isfehan city; So, I called one of my expert friend in traveling. he states that, I must call professional leader and tour guid in order to create impressive travel for my employer, but I believe I could handle it for myselfe. In isfehan we confront with considerable issue which make this travel the worst travel of my life. thus, it can be seen, this worse travel wouldn't occur if I lesten to my friend guideline and advise.
Another reason is that the best performance which is the direct consequence of a expert tour. I read several articles about being perfect tour guid in Iranian culture journal three months ago. they analyze the various impact of tour guid on the travel; hence, assume that it has undeniable impacts especially on financal part. one of the articles estimates that approximately 30 percent reduction occurred when people travel by tour guid agancies. For instance, I can remember when I was studying power electronics at Guilan university nine years ago. my induction motors teacher provid us to off campus travel. I can remember he had insufficient experience on traveling; hence, we initiated tour at the morning, but reached our destination approxim 8 pm. thus, it seems reasonable to assume from this experience traveling in a group is the best way for pervent from wasting time.
In conclusion, though some may oppose this concept, the best way for traveling is being parts of the grup with expert leader. Not only because of best performance for a trip, but also it will be perfect travel by perfect tour guid. Every people should go to travel by expert tour guid to pervent from easting time and purchasing a lower finance.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, may, nevertheless, so, thus, whereas, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2260.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 464.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87068965517 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70166743856 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523706896552 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 707.4 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.1895158484 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.1666666667 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3333333333 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.45833333333 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0442057717964 0.236089414692 19% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.017211545621 0.076458572812 23% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0246488871424 0.0737576698707 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0305250577235 0.150856017488 20% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0132931419005 0.0645574589148 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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