In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decision for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Consultation is always important for good decision making. we can consult with various people to make a suitable decision in the important and sensational situations of our life. The parents are the best persons whom we can talk to them about our decisions, but I believe nowadays the role of parents in decision making of their children is decreasing in comparison to past time. I substantiate my idea by some supportive reasons explained below.
First and foremost, the advent of new technology causes this change of trend. the invention of computers, the internet, cell phones, etc creates many new opportunities that were not available in the past time. unfortunately, most of the parents cannot adapt themselves to these changes and they do not have sufficient information to give good advises. For example, I remember when I wanted to choose the computer science as my major field of study in university, my parents had no idea about this field, and job opportunities related to this field after the graduation or the courses which would be presented later. as a result, consultation with them was useless.
Furthermore, nowadays young people are more independent from their parents in comparison to past young people to young people in the past, specifically in the economic aspects of their life. in the past time, the young people were obliged to follow their parents in many facets, most importantly in their job. they do the same job as their father do because they could have obtained the necessary education by their father easily, and there were not too many other choices. so, the children automatically followed their parents in other areas like marriage, where to live, etc and consulted with them in mentioned subjects. nevertheless, today's young people can change their job easily because new conditions allow them to learn different kinds of career. for instance, in the past, a child whose father sold carpet continued his job because he was not enabled to change or it was too difficult, but now a child in the same situation can enroll to the university and study his favorable field and choose his job independently. this change enables children to make money independently and because of that, they don't pursue their parents in other decisions and cause them to feel they are better than their parents in decision making.
Consequently, based on the above discussion, the emergence of the new technology and the existence of many different opportunities make the young people decide with less dependency on their parents. I strongly claim that these two factors cause such changes.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, nevertheless, so, as to, for example, for instance, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2192.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 430.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0976744186 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79229024326 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495348837209 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 684.9 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.9831628355 48.9658058833 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.777777778 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8888888889 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88888888889 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.5376344086 271% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.419220010531 0.236089414692 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123540319591 0.076458572812 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114490979984 0.0737576698707 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229614616485 0.150856017488 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.128528238318 0.0645574589148 199% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.