At the present, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of adults, compared with the number of old people.
Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages.
With the rapid advancement of modern world, more and more people are employed in science and technology fields. Many young people work more than specified hours for companies to increase revenue, they contribute more compared to that of the aging population in any sector. For Example, a youth can work for more time than an old person because of stamina and energy they have.
Secondly, huge amount of production and output rates are achieved by their working capacity hence, they directly contribute to the country's economy. For Instance, In Japan due to more aging people, adults perform more to compensate the loss. Moreover, older people are mostly dependent on others for their daily activities and medical issues. With more older citizens in a country mean, that most of the young people are involved in helping them. Additionally, most of the old people cannot work with modern amenities, thus always depends on others.
On the other side, A society with huge number of old people is often more safe with values and traditions. Generally, most of the criminal activities are organised by young adults or teenagers, like the street gangs of California. In the countries like Japan, due to the aging population and the young giving respect to old, the crime rate is very minimal making the way to a safe society. Furthermore, more young people in a country mean more competition for jobs. What I mean by this is that with the growing population and limited number of resources, there is a huge demand for jobs with high competitions. For example, In Nigeria, the amount of young people unemployed is very high compared to the west. Finally, culture and habits can change abnormally among the new generation without old people.
To sum up, although old people teach the traditions and customs to young, they cannot work and depend on others. Young people are actively involved in any activity resulting in quality and assurance. In my opinion, the benefits of more young people in the form of working capacity and revenue generation outweigh all the advantages of old.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 349, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'older' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: older
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, furthermore, hence, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, for instance, i mean, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1742.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 347.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02017291066 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55918490313 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50144092219 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 556.2 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 24.6654779493 49.4020404114 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 96.7777777778 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2777777778 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141465966621 0.244688304435 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.052731420861 0.084324248473 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0482214130153 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.090568646387 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0545372474705 0.056905535591 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.0946893788 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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