The following appeared as part of the Dean’s newsletter:
"The University of Wabash is considering a community service requirement for all undergraduate and graduate students. We believe that the objective of any university is to produce well-rounded and charitable members of society. The proposed graduation requirement would be to complete at least 8 hours of unpaid community service per month for a total of 9 months. The Dean’s office will maintain a list of approved local charities on its website with contact information. This is a fantastic opportunity for students to give back to the community and gain real-world working experience. Most importantly, local charities in need will receive the help that they need to continue their efforts."
The given argument seeks to get benefits in the form of objectives for the college and hence tries to take up community service as a point to achieve it.
First of all, the given newsletter states that they believe that community service helps to build well rounded members. Irrespective of the benefits to the college, each and every one must try to contribute or help towards society instead of some higher official from the college trying to impose such things on their students. Not only students but all the members of the college must participate in such activities.
College tries to propose some number of hours for such services. Instead of specifying such stringent limited hours for community services, students must try to contribute each and every day whenever possible. This should not be done for some personal benefits or grading scores. The newsletter also does not show any evidence that if students try to work for the number of hours and months specified, it helps them to build a well-rounded profile.
This could be one of the best thing that a university undertakes to increase the value of charity and giving back to society. But students must not take this up as some perfunctory task which has been made compulsory by the college and everyone should do the same.
Also the newsletter tries to thwart their students by keeping community service as a part of the graduation requirement. What if any student is already a part of such activities outside the college? Such scenarios should also be taken into consideration. Also university must try to provide enough ways in which students can contribute to such issues by they themselves contacting such charities instead of students reaching out to them.
At the end, I would like to say that instead of universities having such stringent guidelines for community services, students must take it up according to their interests and try to give back to community in any ways possible.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 329 350
No. of Characters: 1602 1500
No. of Different Words: 159 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.259 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.869 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.637 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 112 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 95 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 63 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.933 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.865 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.359 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.64 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.099 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 166, Rule ID: EACH_AND_EVERY[1]
Message: Consider using 'each one'.
Suggestion: each one
...pective of the benefits to the college, each and every one must try to contribute or help towards ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 17, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...e and everyone should do the same. Also the newsletter tries to thwart their st...
^^^^
Line 17, column 256, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...hould also be taken into consideration. Also university must try to provide enough w...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, so, well, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 19.6327345309 25% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1653.0 2260.96107784 73% => OK
No of words: 329.0 441.139720559 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02431610942 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7000669109 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489361702128 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 513.0 705.55239521 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.794837883 57.8364921388 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.2 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9333333333 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.4 5.70786347227 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152570555548 0.218282227539 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0618160611354 0.0743258471296 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0488428259882 0.0701772020484 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0891491451905 0.128457276422 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0265997639419 0.0628817314937 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 98.500998004 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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