The following is part of a letter from the Brookfree School Board. "As part of our new educational reform program, we identified ten schools most in need of immediate improvement. An advisory committee is now recommending that we hire consultants to study further the schools' problems and to propose a plan of action. Only two years ago, however, another group of consultants determined that several schools in our district had problems because their principals were inexperienced. Thus, if we want to see immediate improvement in our schools and save the district the money it would spend on hiring more consultants, we should replace all the principals in the ten worst schools with ten of our most experienced principals in the district. " Discuss how well reasoned you find this argument.
In the context, the author concludes that they need to change all the principles of the ten worst school in their district to improve the academic condition. To justify his conclusion, he provides some logic by adressing a solution which was given by the consultants about two years ago. Moreover, he also stated that by imposing the same resolution for this recent problem will save money of hiring new consultants. however, careful scrutiny view reveals that there are profuse amount of loopholes in the evidence which make this argument untenable. Hence, the argument can be considered unsubstantiated.
Firstly, the author merely assume that cause is same for the recent conundrum & previous one. it is pressumption witout having much solid ground. The author specifically mentioned that two years ago the principle were inexperienced thats why ther were replaced. On the other hand, in recent case it is only stated that ten schools is needed emergency improvement but on which sector it has not been said. it might be happened that the teachers of the schools are fledging or the students facility is not adequate. beside that, it might be happened that principles are well experienced but academic council of the school are indolent to make a improvement. Without investigating this things, just implicated a ancient resolution can excerbated this problem.
Furthermore, the author cites to supplemental his critiques that implicating the two years ago solution will help to save the school money. however, money can be saved in some other way. For example, the authority can conduct a survey among the students & teachers to identify the problems of the schools which is free of cost. it might be happened that the ten school has ten differrent problems so individuals survey on each school is necessarily to be implicated. After having the survey result the authority can easily identify what is the problem, there will not be a need to hire consultants. Thererfore, this is a exceptional method where the author can save the school money with such a logical way.
Finally, the author argument will be robusted if he mentioned that the ten school principles are inexperienced as like before or there is a complain against the principles. beside this if the author mention that how much money is needed to hire the consultants it will be easy to evaluate the authors arguments. To bolster his justification the author can also give some survey results which indicates the how many teachers & students are satisfied with priciples.
In summary, the argument can be considered unpersuasive as it stands with such porosity. To bolster this, the authort has needed to provide concrete evidence perhpas by givihng some data of the school survey to clarify the view on which specific sectors it requires improvement.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 460 350
No. of Characters: 2309 1500
No. of Different Words: 208 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.631 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.02 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.741 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 176 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 129 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 94 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.853 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.562 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.341 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.561 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.094 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 418, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...l save money of hiring new consultants. however, careful scrutiny view reveals that the...
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Line 1, column 480, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'amounts'?
Suggestion: amounts
...iny view reveals that there are profuse amount of loopholes in the evidence which make...
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Line 7, column 95, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...or the recent conundrum & previous one. it is pressumption witout having much soli...
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Line 7, column 233, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
...rs ago the principle were inexperienced thats why ther were replaced. On the other ha...
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Line 7, column 299, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ed. On the other hand, in recent case it is only stated that ten schools is neede...
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Line 7, column 407, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...t on which sector it has not been said. it might be happened that the teachers of ...
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Line 7, column 473, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the teachers of the schools are fledging or the students facility is not adequate...
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Line 7, column 482, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...ers of the schools are fledging or the students facility is not adequate. beside that, ...
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Line 7, column 517, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Beside
... the students facility is not adequate. beside that, it might be happened that princip...
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Line 7, column 644, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ncil of the school are indolent to make a improvement. Without investigating this...
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Line 7, column 681, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ke a improvement. Without investigating this things, just implicated a ancient resol...
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Line 7, column 710, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...estigating this things, just implicated a ancient resolution can excerbated this ...
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Line 11, column 60, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...thor cites to supplemental his critiques that implicating the two years ago solut...
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Line 11, column 142, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: However
...ion will help to save the school money. however, money can be saved in some other way. ...
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Line 11, column 330, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...s of the schools which is free of cost. it might be happened that the ten school h...
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Line 11, column 621, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...o hire consultants. Thererfore, this is a exceptional method where the author can...
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Line 15, column 139, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...nexperienced as like before or there is a complain against the principles. beside this if ...
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Line 15, column 174, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Beside
...e is a complain against the principles. beside this if the author mention that how muc...
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Line 15, column 403, Rule ID: THE_HOW[1]
Message: Did you mean 'how'?
Suggestion: how
...ive some survey results which indicates the how many teachers & students are satisfied ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, so, well, for example, in summary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.6327345309 158% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 28.8173652695 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2397.0 2260.96107784 106% => OK
No of words: 460.0 441.139720559 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21086956522 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6311565067 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83835318532 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 204.123752495 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465217391304 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 742.5 705.55239521 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.22255489022 261% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.9309356419 57.8364921388 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.217391304 119.503703932 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.69565217391 5.70786347227 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.25449101796 362% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.122989163462 0.218282227539 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0413186794214 0.0743258471296 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0383748230909 0.0701772020484 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0796807983807 0.128457276422 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0185460091255 0.0628817314937 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.3799401198 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 98.500998004 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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