Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for governments to spend money to improve internet access than to improve public transportation.
Nowadays, governments have different tasks that they have to concern about. From public transportation to the internet accessibility, authorities should demonstrates plans for these aspects. Many people assert that since we live in the information era, the internet is way more crucial than public transportation while others believe otherwise. As far as I am concerned, the second group's idea is superior than the first one.
First of all, if people cannot travel through the city or between cities, how could they manage their lives? Of course, the internet is very useful, but the transportation is a vital part of the society due to the need of transportation. For example, imagine you were accepted in a university in a city which contains speedy internet sevices but has lack of proper transportation. You submitted classes through the net but when you wanted to participate in those classes, you could not reach to the university on time because of the weak transport system. And it is not just restricted to this area, if you wanted to purchase some necessary products, you could not reach downtown so easily since the reason mentioned before.
Last but not the least, the internet is just like transport system in the virtual world; therefore, it is not wise to abandon the real world in order to achieve tha artificial one. What I mean is simple, people should concentrate on the reality which is their true life whereas the net which is not exist in reality should not become the major concern. In order to do so, the government should invest more in the public transportation and all of real aspects of society members than a wasteful concentration on artificial services.
All in all, the officials' investment of the public transportation is not only a duty for them but also is a necessity for citizens' lives. so, in my opinion, vast investment on the internet is both a waste of money and harmful for society, hence the government should tighten its budget for the important aspects of people's lives.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: 'demonstrate'
Suggestion: demonstrate
...ernet accessibility, authorities should demonstrates plans for these aspects. Many people as...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'groups'' or 'group's'?
Suggestion: groups'; group's
...e. As far as I am concerned, the second groups idea is superior than the first one. ...
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Message: The adjective superior is normally used with 'to'.
Suggestion: to
...ned, the second groups idea is superior than the first one. First of all, if peopl...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'existed'.
Suggestion: existed
... true life whereas the net which is not exist in reality should not become the major ...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'officials'' or 'official's'?
Suggestion: officials'; official's
... artificial services. All in all, the officials investment of the public transportation...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...also is a necessity for citizens lives. so, in my opinion, vast investment on the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, second, so, therefore, whereas, while, for example, i mean, of course, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1682.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 340.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94705882353 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87630066862 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538235294118 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 523.8 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.1429277244 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.142857143 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2857142857 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.07142857143 5.45110844103 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209321230293 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0705970414483 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0475559538316 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123897818226 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0290318643795 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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