TPO 52Do you agree or disagree? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.
The difference between generations has become conspicuous more than ever. People of both sides claim that there is a lack of mutual understandings among them. The chokepoint of this controversy is obeying the law. Albeit many people specifically middle-aged mature assert that adolescents should stick to the rules, teenagers believe that rules are just as restricted as a prison. As far as I am concerned, I am an adolescent, so I believe that young adults have many points.
First of all, life has been changed these days; therefore, old rules are not a suitable alternative for following by young adults. So, my peers and I think that if we had not disobeyed the rules in the past, the current lives of us would not happen. For example, if Einstein, a famous physician, had followed the old rules, none of these signs of progress would become parts of reality. The point is, He stood upon his idea, hence he knew the fact that old rules should be abandoned to attain enormous amount of benefits. Consequently, why should we not follow his lead?
Moreover, the regulations established in societies nowadays are written by the authorities who are old, so they cannot understand the needs of the adolescents efficiently. Therefore, all of the assembled statutes are not appropriately designed to confront Teenagers' needs. For example, In Iran, the government prohibits adolescents to have parties despite the fact that teenagers require these parties in order to release their extra energy and satisfy their desire for adventures.
In conclusion, Society should let adolescents choose their destiny by themselves. Obeying limited rules is neither a good way nor a perfect option for society salvation. Therefore, allow young adults to act freely not only is not a waste of social potential but also it can cause society blooming. So, in my opinion, middle-aged adults should let teenagers follow their dreams.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 184, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...the adolescents efficiently. Therefore, all of the assembled statutes are not appropriatel...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, if, moreover, so, therefore, for example, i think, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1606.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 313.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13099041534 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86897756445 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.591054313099 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 499.5 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1164147043 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.4705882353 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4117647059 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.76470588235 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146010670834 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0461676595833 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0335550865819 0.0737576698707 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0852909610407 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0424307902221 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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