TPO 34 independent essay
some people think that it is harder to educate kids now than past. Personally, I believe that it is not harder than before. I feel like this fore three reasons which I explore them in the following essay.
First of all, they can learn much more with cell phones but we must teach them how they use cell phones. I mean, we can teach them how they can search about exciting topics with cell phones. I remember an experiment about my friend. She've never let her son to use the cell phone. I found out that he work with it secretly. I told my friend that let him to use it and it can make him not to work secretly and he won't face to its consquences.
Second of all, if they spend their time on games or something like that it can make their brain more active. using brain to think or decide makes its cells to work much more than before. For instance, I know someone who are master of online games. Once I asked him to fix my computer although he didn't study lessons or learn about computer. Surprisingly, he could fix my computer and it works better than before because he changed some softwares and installed new ones.
Finally, maybe some kids waste their time by playing online games or something like that but at least they don't go for something worse that these kind of things such as drugs or something. one of my ex neighbors had a son who had been always playing in the alley. one day we realized that he'd smoked drugs with his friends.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that using technology doesn't make education hard. this is because learning more and being more active and not doing worse deeds than them.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, may, second, so, at least, for instance, i feel, i mean, in conclusion, kind of, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1323.0 1977.66487455 67% => OK
No of words: 303.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.36633663366 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.1668470085 2.67179642975 81% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.554455445545 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 406.8 618.680645161 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.357981811 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 69.6315789474 100.406767564 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9473684211 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.68421052632 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0115648827311 0.236089414692 5% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00438996902313 0.076458572812 6% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0186250611927 0.0737576698707 25% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0101274193714 0.150856017488 7% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0202548387427 0.0645574589148 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.1 11.7677419355 60% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 81.63 58.1214874552 140% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 10.1575268817 55% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 7.77 10.9000537634 71% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.67 8.01818996416 83% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 86.8835125448 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 6.0 10.247311828 59% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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