TPO 34 Independent Writing TaskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone online games and social networking Web site Us

Together with the improvements in society, it seems evident that teaching children have been a tough job nowadays compared to the past. Thus, the question has been raised whether technological gadgets are the ones to be blamed or not. While it is undeniable that both arguments have their own merits to boast; if forced to choose one over another, my resolute standpoint is definitely in line with technology not to be blamed. I will explain the reasons in the following essay.

To begin with, smartphones or tablets help students to collect a variety of information through online portal sites such as Google, Wikipedia, and Yahoo. In other words, the child can search online for any facts that they do not know which helps them to broaden their horizon. I assume that a personal example can shed light on this notion. When I was in Year 4, I always used my iPhone to search for the answers about my History assignment and by doing so, I was able to understand the particular chapter in detail. Should Children use smartphones, they can comprehend the content of the subject more easily and quickly.

Moreover, online games regarding educational courses can motivate children to study and absorb details in a fun way. In fact, a study by the University of Harvard shows that when a child is involved in a game based-learning, they tend to expand their memory capacity which in turn, score excellent academic results. It goes without saying that teachers should implement online games as a homework rather than paper-based homework to appeal and encourage more students to complete their assignments in time. This clearly shows why technology helps students to learn more effectively.

In conclusion, I strongly disagree that technology affects a teacher's ability to teach young people because of the abovementioned reasons. Therefore, nothing in my mind cast doubt on my stance regarding the given statement.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a fun way" with adverb for "fun"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...te children to study and absorb details in a fun way. In fact, a study by the University of ...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teachers'' or 'teacher's'?
Suggestion: teachers'; teacher's
...ngly disagree that technology affects a teachers ability to teach young people because o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, regarding, so, therefore, thus, while, in conclusion, in fact, such as, in other words, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1603.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 316.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07278481013 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7870729443 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.629746835443 0.524837075471 120% => OK
syllable_count: 495.0 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.4426049609 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.866666667 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0666666667 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 5.45110844103 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163810210043 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0473351415731 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0303482126319 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0835764913241 0.150856017488 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0299355287198 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.38 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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