is it good to take risks?
In today's sophisticated and progressive world where we live, man kinds always are preoccupied with finding a way to achieve success. In this vein, while some practitioners believe that persisting in doing activities in which we are adept paves our path to success, others think adversely holding the view that taking risks and doing novel activities help us to become prosperous people. I, personally speaking, agree with the latter one and think that we should be a risk seeker in order to be a successful individual and the reasons to support my viewpoint are mentioned in the following paragraphs.
First, risk taking behaviors provide us an opportunity to become more experienced. When we do novel tasks we face with new and challenging situations on which we should overcome,so, we learn various things about these kinds of situations and as a result, we would gain invaluable experiences. The role of these novel experiences get bold when we want to take a decent job in the industry. Almost all employers prefer to expel labors who not only can tackle convoluted problems in work environment, but also have a creative mind to give new ideas,since in contemporary world the business environment is very competitive and new thinks which come from a genus mind can provide businesses with competitive advantage. So, because they do not fear from encountering to unknown conditions, risk takers are more experienced and have more imaginable mind which helps them to think beyond the boundaries and give new ideas. Thus, employers prefer to hire risk-seeker people.
Second, taking the risks leads u to find our true love more easily. Let me put this claim in a more vivid picture, Some years ago, I had a close friend who was studying computer engineering at college. After graduation, he hired in a prestigious information technology company as computer programmer. After one year working at that firm, he found his job boring,so, although he was paid a good fortune, he decided to resign from his job and follow his real interest which was being a journalist. He expelled in a local newspaper as a part-time journalist and because that was his willingness he tried so hard to act his best and now he is a major columnist in our country whose analysis get the attention of all the community. It is clear that he could find his true love since he is a risk-seeker who does not fear from making any change in his life even if these changes look irrational at the first glance.
In conclusion, although we should do activities in which we are good, I think being a risk taker,especially in our modern world, conveys us to success with a higher percentage of certainty since risk takers are more experienced and have a more creative mind which help them to promote in their work and also risk seekers can find their true desires more readily because the do not afraid change.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...their true desires more readily because the do not afraid change.
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Message: The adjective afraid is used with 'to': 'afraid to change'.
Suggestion: afraid to change
...desires more readily because the do not afraid change.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, second, so, thus, while, i think, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2392.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 491.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8716904277 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70728369723 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84785503286 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535641547862 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 748.8 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 91.8633283403 48.9658058833 188% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.5 100.406767564 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.6875 20.6045352989 149% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197388847922 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0749503385238 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0784858561681 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12442895897 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0278176874877 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.56 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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