The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The optimal way of raising young people is a controversial issue, but there is no doubt that it has a significant impact on the future of society. While the ideal environment for children's development might not be obvious at first glance, it is clear that we need to raise our young people with the values of a society in mind in order for them to become the successful leaders of tomorrow. Therefore, I believe that cooperative education should substitute the competitive kind.
Firstly, by instilling a sense of cooperation in young people, the society teaches them about working within a team, which is undoubtfully a valuable skill for any future leadership position. A leader needs to know how to delegate, how to manage a team of people, and how to consider their individual skills and characteristics. These skills are not inherent, but taught, which is why cooperating with peers from a young age can yield successful adults in their respective industry.
Secondly, a person in a powerful position should be able to relate to the issues of the people they are responsible for. For example, a government official must know what the people need and want in order to lead them successfully. Without a sense of collaboration and team spirit, this cannot be achieved.
Some may argue that, by raising our young people in a competitive way, we teach them valuable skills such as working independently and striving for the best in every way possible. However, a society filled with people who are only capable of working on their own is not a society in its true form. Our world would be chaotic if all of us would try to succeed and to make others worse off in the process, and our children should not be raised in this spirit.
In conclusion, those who argue that competition is more valuable than cooperation in young people's education are shortsighted. In order to build a society based on mutual respect, and prosperity, we need leaders who know how to cooperate and work together for the greater good. Thus, we shall raise the young people of today in a spirit of cooperation, rather than competition.
- The perceived greatness of any political leader has more to do with the challenges faced by that leader than with any of his or her inherent skills and abilities. 79
- The following is taken from a memo from the advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production Company.“According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen-produced movies than in a 42
- Sports stars and movie stars have an obligation to behave as role models for the young people who look up to them. In return for the millions of dollars that they are paid, we should expect them to fulfill this societal responsibility.Write a response in 83
- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree 54
- A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college. 75
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 10, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'argues'.
Suggestion: argues
...this cannot be achieved. Some may argue that, by raising our young people in a ...
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Line 13, column 50, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a competitive way" with adverb for "competitive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...argue that, by raising our young people in a competitive way, we teach them valuable skills such as ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, no doubt, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1767.0 2235.4752809 79% => OK
No of words: 362.0 442.535393258 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88121546961 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85883309247 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 215.323595506 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.533149171271 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 545.4 704.065955056 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.8547753813 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.8 118.986275619 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1333333333 23.4991977007 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.13333333333 5.21951772744 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251612494068 0.243740707755 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0835078659621 0.0831039109588 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0594342776249 0.0758088955206 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138804767412 0.150359130593 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0135644140423 0.0667264976115 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.1392134831 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.8420337079 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 100.480337079 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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