Many lives might be saved if inoculations against cow flu were routinely administered to all people in areas where the disease is detected. However, since there is a small possibility that a person will die as a result of the inoculations, we cannot permit inoculations against cow flu to be routinely administered.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The argument suggest that the lives of people can be saved to more extent if the innoculations against cow flu are routinely administered to all people in the areas where the disease is detected. However, since the number of cases where death was caused by innoculations to the flu exist in some number it would be unjust to carry out such measures.
Firstly, the argument is unlcear as it mentions 'Many poeple might be saved' and also 'there is a small possibility that a person will die as a result of the innoculations' The two statements are contradicting to one another. One mentions significant number of deaths due the lack of innoculations while other ascribe innoculations as the cause of death. Had there been some specific numbers, or percentages of people died due to the cause the argument would be more plausible.
Secondly, the argument suggest routine administration of innoculations to areas where the disease is detected. There is no data so as to how much of the area where the disease was detected has been harmed by the disease. If there is little or no harm there is no need of regular displatch of the innoculations. While on the other hand if the harm is more the routine administration of innoculations might be helpful. Ther is no data about the etxent of harm the disease has caused in te areas it was detected. The author could have provided more such data to make the argument even more sound.
Thirdly, there is no surity about whether the innoculations were actually helpful. It might have happened that the innoculations those were sent didn't prove much useful rather some other method helped in cure of the disease. So even if the innoculations are routinely administered, we cannot guarantee the fruitfulness of such regular administration. Had the author ,mentioned the success rates of the provided innoculation the idea of regular adminstration of the innoculations would seem appealing. But since there is no such data, it leaves the argument weak.
Also, the argument stated that there is a small possibiltiy of death due to innoculation so they cannot permit the innoculations against cow flu to be circulated routinely. We do not how small is the possiblity. If the case might be 1 in a 100 that a vaccine lead to death of the diseased the figures are acceptable beacause the number of relieved people are significantly greater. And so that shouldn't stop the innocluations from being routinely administered to the
affected areas. If that happens there would be more deaths due to lasck of the innoculations than there would be due to effect of the innoculations. Had there been a ration of peopple cured by the innoculations to the ones whose condition worsened due to it the argumnent would be more cogent.
Hence the argument of author could have been more convincing has he provided with some actual cases or figures realting to the disease and the effect of innoculations in the areas affected by the disease.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The argument suggest that the lives of people can be saved to more extent if the innoculations against cow flu are routinely administered to all people in the areas where the disease is detected.
Error: innoculations Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: However, since the number of cases where death was caused by innoculations to the flu exist in some number it would be unjust to carry out such measures.
Error: innoculations Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Firstly, the argument is unlcear as it mentions 'Many poeple might be saved' and also 'there is a small possibility that a person will die as a result of the innoculations' The two statements are contradicting to one another.
Error: innoculations Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: poeple Suggestion: people
Error: unlcear Suggestion: unclear
Sentence: One mentions significant number of deaths due the lack of innoculations while other ascribe innoculations as the cause of death.
Error: innoculations Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Secondly, the argument suggest routine administration of innoculations to areas where the disease is detected.
Error: innoculations Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: If there is little or no harm there is no need of regular displatch of the innoculations.
Error: innoculations Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: displatch Suggestion: dispatch
Sentence: While on the other hand if the harm is more the routine administration of innoculations might be helpful.
Error: innoculations Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Ther is no data about the etxent of harm the disease has caused in te areas it was detected.
Error: te Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: etxent Suggestion: extent
Sentence: Thirdly, there is no surity about whether the innoculations were actually helpful.
Error: innoculations Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: surity Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: It might have happened that the innoculations those were sent didn't prove much useful rather some other method helped in cure of the disease.
Error: innoculations Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: didn Suggestion: did
Sentence: So even if the innoculations are routinely administered, we cannot guarantee the fruitfulness of such regular administration.
Error: innoculations Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Had the author ,mentioned the success rates of the provided innoculation the idea of regular adminstration of the innoculations would seem appealing.
Error: innoculations Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: adminstration Suggestion: administration
Error: innoculation Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Also, the argument stated that there is a small possibiltiy of death due to innoculation so they cannot permit the innoculations against cow flu to be circulated routinely.
Error: possibiltiy Suggestion: possibility
Error: innoculations Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: innoculation Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: We do not how small is the possiblity.
Error: possiblity Suggestion: possibility
Sentence: If the case might be 1 in a 100 that a vaccine lead to death of the diseased the figures are acceptable beacause the number of relieved people are significantly greater.
Error: beacause Suggestion: because
Error: vaccine Suggestion: active
Sentence: And so that shouldn't stop the innocluations from being routinely administered to the
Error: shouldn Suggestion: should
Error: innocluations Suggestion: innovation
Sentence: If that happens there would be more deaths due to lasck of the innoculations than there would be due to effect of the innoculations.
Error: innoculations Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: lasck Suggestion: lack
Sentence: Had there been a ration of peopple cured by the innoculations to the ones whose condition worsened due to it the argumnent would be more cogent.
Error: innoculations Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: peopple Suggestion: people
Error: worsened Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: argumnent Suggestion: argument
Sentence: Hence the argument of author could have been more convincing has he provided with some actual cases or figures realting to the disease and the effect of innoculations in the areas affected by the disease.
Error: innoculations Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: realting Suggestion: relating
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 21 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 505 350
No. of Characters: 2412 1500
No. of Different Words: 199 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.74 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.776 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.94 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 152 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 114 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 79 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.042 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.663 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.337 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.569 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.113 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 7 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 14, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'suggests'.
Suggestion: suggests
The argument suggest that the lives of people can be saved t...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 129, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...e disease is detected. There is no data so as to how much of the area where the disease ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 146, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... that the innoculations those were sent didnt prove much useful rather some other met...
^^^^^
Line 13, column 355, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ness of such regular administration. Had the author ,mentioned the success rates ...
^^
Line 13, column 367, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... regular administration. Had the author ,mentioned the success rates of the provi...
^^
Line 17, column 213, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... We do not how small is the possiblity. If the case might be 1 in a 100 that a vac...
^^
Line 17, column 395, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
... are significantly greater. And so that shouldnt stop the innocluations from being routi...
^^^^^^^^
Line 19, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Affected
...m being routinely administered to the affected areas. If that happens there would be m...
^^^^^^^^
Line 19, column 17, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...y administered to the affected areas. If that happens there would be more deaths...
^^
Line 23, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...he argumnent would be more cogent. Hence the argument of author could have been ...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, while, as to, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 38.0 19.6327345309 194% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2486.0 2260.96107784 110% => OK
No of words: 503.0 441.139720559 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94234592445 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73578520332 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01057715622 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.393638170974 0.468620217663 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 806.4 705.55239521 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.5022885501 57.8364921388 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.086956522 119.503703932 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8695652174 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.04347826087 5.70786347227 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 16.0 6.88822355289 232% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2750348154 0.218282227539 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0880682813684 0.0743258471296 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0905272676381 0.0701772020484 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144559499073 0.128457276422 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101693966494 0.0628817314937 162% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.3799401198 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 98.500998004 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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