the graph below shows the number of members at agolf club and tennis club from 2005 to 2015.

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the graph below shows the number of members at agolf club and tennis club from 2005 to 2015.

The line graph given presents the amount of members at two clubs ,golf and tennis, during the time period from 2005 to 2015. overall, the number of golf club members plunged, while the quantity in the tennis club swelled.

Looking at the line representing the golf club, membership there began much higher than the tennis club, with 3,000 people. this number remained unchanged until about 2008, when it plummented crazily to almost 0, the lowest point shown. However, membership grew after that, jumping by leaps and bounds to almost 2.000 in 2015.

As to the tennis club numbers, it can be seen that membership began at around 1,800 people, and remained stable until roughly 2009. Then, there was a considerable drop in the number of tennis memberships to 500 in 2015. this was rock bottom for the club during the period presented. Finally, tennis club quantities experienced a marked rise to finish a peak of nearly 3,000 people.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 65, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...sents the amount of members at two clubs ,golf and tennis, during the time period ...
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Line 1, column 126, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Overall
...ring the time period from 2005 to 2015. overall, the number of golf club members plunge...
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Line 1, column 223, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he quantity in the tennis club swelled. Looking at the line representing the gol...
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Line 5, column 125, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...han the tennis club, with 3,000 people. this number remained unchanged until about 2...
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Line 9, column 221, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...r of tennis memberships to 500 in 2015. this was rock bottom for the club during the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, however, look, then, well, while, as to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 33.7804878049 80% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 785.0 965.302439024 81% => OK
No of words: 158.0 196.424390244 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96835443038 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.54539209256 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33461959343 2.65546596893 88% => OK
Unique words: 98.0 106.607317073 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.620253164557 0.547539520022 113% => OK
syllable_count: 212.4 283.868780488 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 20.8439232344 43.030603864 48% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 87.2222222222 112.824112599 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5555555556 22.9334400587 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.23603664747 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.414590119463 0.215688989381 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.167972174509 0.103423049105 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10800075842 0.0843802449381 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.301363232182 0.15604864568 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125897842018 0.0819641961636 154% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.2329268293 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 79.6 61.2550243902 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.3012195122 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.25 11.4140731707 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.06136585366 93% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 40.7170731707 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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