Some parents allow smartphones to kids
Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones( cell phones with internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch.whuch point of view do you agree and why?
Nowadays, our life is surrounded by many new technologies. Cellphones with internet access are the most widespread technology among people especially the youth. Some parents forbid their children from owning smart phones while others believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. In my opinion, I believe that smart phones among young children is a big threat, and it is better to forbid young children from owning smart phones. In fact, they are very disturbing and keep them off task. Also, both parents and Kids do not really need them to keep in touch and without forgetting that the easy access to the internet harm them.
To begin, the technology of smart phones is very disruptive. Kids will be more addicted to phones if they own them. they will spend all their free time on their phones instead of doing physical activities or having fun with their siblings and friends. Moreover phones will distract them from not only doing their homework but also from paying attention to their teachers in classroom while giving instructions or lessons. For instance, as a teacher assistant at middle school, I have been noticed this behavior among students and although the rules that are imposed in the school concerning phones policy but still some students try to snitch and use their phones in classroom in order to connect on social media which affect their education level as well as their grades.
In addition, phones are not the only way for keeping in touch.Students, usually they spend most of their time in school and if parents want to ask how his kid is doing, he can simply make a call to the school and all the needed information will be provided to him. And vice versa if a student want to call his parent , the school provide a phone in each classroom the only thing he needs to do is to dial his parent number. Also, there are new tools that parents can used to track their kids like the smart watch for kids.
Moreover, the easy access to internet harm them. the huge amount of information the internet provided may cause negative effects on them. The criminal games and inappropriate websites, for example, will affect their personalities and their education. By getting addicted to those websites kids 'behavior will change. They may be more aggressive, disrespectful and very demanding. Thus, instead to keep in touch with our kids we will lose their control.
In conclusion, owning a smart phones among young children is a big danger. Smartphones are very disruptive tools, they are not the only way to keep tracking kids and the easy access to internet will threaten their life. For these reasons,It is better to keep our kids far away from this technology as much as we can in order to insure that they are in the right path.
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| 2023-11-19 | SUSANNA PETROSYAN | 84 | view |
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 54, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'phones'' or 'phone's'?
Suggestion: phones'; phone's
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Suggestion: They
...re addicted to phones if they own them. they will spend all their free time on their...
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Line 9, column 253, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...ng fun with their siblings and friends. Moreover phones will distract them from not only...
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Line 9, column 436, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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Line 21, column 331, Rule ID: INSURE_THAT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'ensure' (=make sure)? 'Insure' means 'pay money to insurance company'.
Suggestion: ensure
...echnology as much as we can in order to insure that they are in the right path.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, really, so, still, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 10.4138276553 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 24.0651302605 245% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 41.998997996 162% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2493.0 1615.20841683 154% => OK
No of words: 514.0 315.596192385 163% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85019455253 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76146701107 4.20363070211 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43663093781 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 176.041082164 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.447470817121 0.561755894193 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 730.8 506.74238477 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 16.0721442886 149% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.1139024776 49.4020404114 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.875 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4166666667 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.54166666667 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 19.0 5.01903807615 379% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143402884828 0.244688304435 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0460592939457 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0507743343354 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0884615928895 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0360071386182 0.056905535591 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 50.2224549098 134% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.26 8.58950901804 85% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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