In recent years, pressure on school and university students have been increasing and they are pushed to work very hard from a young age. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Recently, the question of a huge amount of pressure placed on students at schools has become a fiercely controversial issue. Some people assert that this phenomenon exerts positive influences on pupils, while others argue otherwise. Personally, I believe that both arguments should be given equal weight. In the following essay, the evidence supporting this contention will be discussed alongside relevant examples.
On the one hand, it seems difficult to refute the idea that pressure on students has a number of benefits. Perhaps an obvious advantage is that students who are accustomed to experiencing pressure from an early age are more likely to deal with a myriad of situations related to their live wisely since they learned how to become patient. As an illustration, when I was a university student, my school forced me to following gruelling schedules and this experience enabled me to overcome unpredictable situations at my work. In addition, a competitive atmosphere at universities makes it possible for pupils to more concentrate on their academic performance as they are stimulated by their colleges. For these reasons, there does seem to be a solid basis for the claim that pressure have positive effects on students.
On the other hand, it seems short-sighted to contend that imposing a great deal of pressure on students brings with it positives. The most oft-cited argument against such a view is that placing excessive burden on study causes some students to become stressed and it generates some students to commit suicide. Furthermore, pupils who live in competitive society have a tendency to undergo lack of exercising, which leads to not only physical health problems but also mental problems. To exemplify, one recent article released by the Seoul Times illustrates that the number of students attending physical activities on a regular basis has continuously decreased from 2005 to 2018 and the main reason for this phenomenon turned out to be excessive studies.
In light of the above, I also find these persuasive.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, it can be concluded that each side of the debate has its strengths, as discussed above.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, so, while, in addition, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 41.998997996 145% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1948.0 1615.20841683 121% => OK
No of words: 367.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30790190736 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95150588225 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58583106267 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 621.0 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.0619077449 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.75 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9375 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8125 7.06120827912 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198033566087 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.054500494018 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0329064080841 0.0667982634062 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0840187268579 0.151304729494 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0604394995641 0.056905535591 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.55 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 78.4519038076 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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