some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?
Being educated persons have a significant role in today's development society. Every parent tries to persuade their children to study. Some parents think offering money to school-aged children for each high grade puts them in a successful path and some others disagree. I totally disagree with this statement, which I explore in the following essay.
First of all, the phenomenon that parents give money as a reward for getting a high mark in schools turns to be a public issue. It is obvious that giving money as a reward changes students' opinion that only money is the purpose of the study and they expect money for their every success. With becoming older their parents can't afford to pay more money to achieve. So they won't have an adequate motivate to keep on their studying.
Second, Offering money for each high mark causes adverse competition among the students. The registered students in one school have different families with different levels. Some of them are wealthy and some of them are poor. If the family wants to give money for each success, they can do this according to their budget. So in this situation, rich children will think they are higher than everyone. On the opposite side, the poor students' achievements seem tiny for everyone. Furthermore, this kind of persuading is not beneficial.
Although this action has the abovementioned disadvantages, it has some good aspects too. Giving money to children stimulate them to study hard. When they work hard and try a lot repeatedly they become successful and have a fun time because of this achievement.
In conclusion, I strongly disagree with this statement that students should be given money as a reward for each achievement. Although this action has some advantages such as students' hardworking, but have some disadvantages like negative competition among students and this opinion that only money is the purpose of the study.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 323, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...cess. With becoming older their parents cant afford to pay more money to achieve. So...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, second, so, in conclusion, kind of, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1600.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 315.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07936507937 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70899884259 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51746031746 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 497.7 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.907782842 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.0 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.75 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.3 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.458988433714 0.236089414692 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127541978295 0.076458572812 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102576553386 0.0737576698707 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.256900603249 0.150856017488 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0904181945182 0.0645574589148 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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