In the past, it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future.
Throughout history, human beings have been putting all of their efforts to find a suitable job. As humans are living in civilized societies, we all need a good job which provides a better future and a well social position. Since the advent of technology, new careers were appeared. This concept has played a dominant role in individuals' way of living, but there exists a controversy and heated debate among some people regarding upcoming jobs. Some people are inclining toward the opinion that the dawn of technology and other sciences make a safe condition for your vocation and you can have a better future, whereas others hold exactly the opposite perspective. I agree with the prior idea, and in the subsequent paragraphs, I will explicate the most outstanding reasons and provide some details which can aptly elucidate my point of view.
The most prominent point is that having a decent job plays a signification and undeniable role in one's success and happiness. since the advent of technology, new countless positions are created, and many graduated students, all over the world, could have good jobs and good salaries. but these sciences are advancing rapidly and this feature causes a lot of merits and demerits. This progress of knowledge can make a better life and establish new jobs which obsolete previous occupations. For instance, one of the big and successful companies, Nokia, was a victim of the progress of science when it could not update and adapt itself. Hence, it was abolished and its employees were fired.
Another equally and exquisite point that I want to mention regarding the jobs future, is political conditions. Since the dawn of civilization, many developing countries are experiencing different status because of the different political conditions. Consequently, this issue changes the jobs future. Obviously, a better political condition provides more job opportunities for people. For example, my country, Iran, face many political problems nowadays and it causes very bad condition for many companies and factories. In Sharif University of Tehran, one of the most prestigious universities in my country, a very reliable research conducted recently which encompassed the impact of politics on jobs. The study revealed that 60 percent of small companies were closed because of the political issues.
In short, all the aforementioned reasons led us to the conclusion that these days many situations play an important role in jobs. Contrary to the past, you have to update your knowledge and consider the political sate constantly.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, hence, if, regarding, so, well, whereas, for example, for instance, in short
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2181.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 410.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31951219512 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.865318061 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558536585366 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 686.7 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.6831919528 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.857142857 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5238095238 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52380952381 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.109624127203 0.236089414692 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0361910926136 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0361601507311 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0618306644841 0.150856017488 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0282924891378 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.59 8.01818996416 120% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 86.8835125448 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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