Present a written argument or a case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the followin topic:
There are many different types of music in the world today, why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the international music that is heard everywhere.
Nowadays, various music genres are found around the globe. Music is soothing to the soul and brings healing to the wounded and crushed spirit in an amazing way. However, in my opinion traditional music plays an important role in our life, as it has deep roots of our culture compared to international music which might focus on the artist's life experience.
Music is all around us! It refreshes the mind, as well as bringing mental stability as one listen word for word and meditates upon it. Traditional music plays a huge role in societies as it brings consolation and is a way of communicating intended message to the people. For instance, in Zimbabwe at funerals, people sing traditional songs accompanied with dances which has a comforting effect to the bereaving family. In some cases the family members of the deceased can join in singing and dancing as a way of celebrating the departed's life.
Furthermore, traditional music existed from ancient times. It is a way of showcasing one's culture. People have a better understanding of the meaning of the lyrics of the traditional music, therefore, it is crucial for a nation to have its own cultural music for distinction. For example, the national anthem of a country is a perfect illustration of a traditional music.
However, celebrating cultural diversity is in the genes of humans. The younger generation prefer international music than traditional music genre. It is crucial to be considerate and give them a chance to enjoy the type of music they want, as they are energetic and globetrotters and they interact with peers from different nations. International music is fashionable especially to these younger people, as they are still exploring and spent much of their time partying and going to concert.
In conclusion, traditional music celebrates culture of a particular nation and mostly accepted by older people, whilst international music is usually in the heart of younger generation. Cultural music usually has a meaning in its lyrics and centred on comforting people and bringing psychological healing which international music does not offer most of the time.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 143, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an amazing way" with adverb for "amazing"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...aling to the wounded and crushed spirit in an amazing way. However, in my opinion traditional mus...
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Line 1, column 333, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'artists'' or 'artist's'?
Suggestion: artists'; artist's
...national music which might focus on the artists life experience. Music is all arou...
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Line 9, column 86, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ncient times. It is a way of showcasing ones culture. People have a better understan...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...er generation prefer international music than traditional music genre. It is cruc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, so, still, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as well as, in my opinion, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1804.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 348.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18390804598 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02546771289 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51724137931 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 574.2 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.9441210245 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.117647059 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4705882353 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285078747326 0.244688304435 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102794841018 0.084324248473 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.063937857007 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172709717775 0.151304729494 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0354527941989 0.056905535591 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.