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we should pay attention to the famous people

whether we like it or don't like famous people live in our society and have always opinions about different situations. some people think famous persons are always right but other think famous people are the same as other people and we shouldn’t give priority to their opinions. i think we should not rely on what famous people say and don't follow what they say because of two reasons.
first, famous people and celebrities have different status from the rest of society. in the other word, their living condition are always better so they can’t think like common people so they can't have right opinion about current situation of society. for example last year we have an inflation in price of goods in our country. most of celebrities believe the living condition hadn't been changed and were against the protest of the people. this is because of that the famous people have high income so increase in the price of the good won't affect their live so they can't make decision for the people life and their protests
second, celebrities usually have'nt any expertise unless in art or a specific sport. you can't expect an artist or an athlete to be an expert in politics or economy. for example, last year we have a parliamentary election in our country. most of famous people tried to have impact on decision of people and control the results of election. unfortunately, they succeed and people listen to what they saied and elected the wrong people to go to the parliament. if we knew the famous people don't have an skill in science in politics we hadn't obey their opinion and could elect the right persons who can help the progress of our country.
in conclusion, famous people don't give their opinions about current situation of a society because they don't live like the common people of society and they mustn’t give their opinions about different subjects beacuse they don't have any expertise. so i think we don't pay any attention to famous people and they should focus on their own work

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, for example, i think, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1652.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 347.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76080691643 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3369821217 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.435158501441 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 512.1 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.0267735862 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.133333333 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1333333333 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 32.0 5.5376344086 578% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.363477446512 0.236089414692 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.149484990695 0.076458572812 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124766129144 0.0737576698707 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.248446512946 0.150856017488 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0816299326098 0.0645574589148 126% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.28 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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