Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A job with more vacation time but a low salary is better than a job with a high salary but less vacation time. Use specific reasons to support your answer.
In contemporary society, excursion becomes a famous activity for majority of people in the world. Some people thus choose occupation with extensive vacation time, even though it provides a low income. As far as I am concerned, I strongly agree with such notion. I believe that working career with high revenue is more significant as money is, inevitably, desirable for humans' living in various ways. This essay will provide further aspects and examples to support this idea in the subsequent paragraphs.
First and foremost, money allows people to live a lavish lifestyle. These days, individuals have to spend more an amount of money than those in the olden days on many indispensable things, such as houses and food. Moreover, going to an excursion is costly, and therefore, people should work to acquire a high compensation in order to afford an exclusive vacation. I can attest this from my own experience; my father and my mother spent their large amount of money that they gained from their endeavors on our last annual trip in Japan. We booked a room in the luxury hotel in Shibuya, and ate high-quality buffet. Furthermore, my mother went shopping for many clothes and perfumes. Although we do not have much time to travel frequently, every our vacation trips were remarkable.
Secondly, another fact that supports my standpoint is that money helps people in unexpected situations. Unfortunately, humans are inevitably subjected to unpredictable ailments and accidents. Consequently, individuals have to pay close attention to their financial stability, and they should have enough reserved currency to pay medication fees from those radical scenarios. According to the research from Chulalongkorn University in Bangkok, a plethora of employees in Bangkok tend to spend their fund on vacationing rather than save it for any emergency cases. This accounts for sixty percent of all Bangkok's personnel have low financial stability. Furthermore, they have credit debts that cause them have excessive expenditure. If they had decided to work with less excursions instead, their life would have been more stable.
In conclusion, I firmly maintain the belief that working a high-income profession is more preferable than working a job with more vacation days. This is due to the fact that money allows people to have comfortable vacations, and people need to prepare for urgent medications.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 765, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun excursions is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...iture. If they had decided to work with less excursions instead, their life would ha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, furthermore, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2020.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 381.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30183727034 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91757047368 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601049868766 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 635.4 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.594205179 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.1904761905 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1428571429 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.19047619048 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177266640328 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.052043996203 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0684299741907 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123918380968 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.058694263061 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.16 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.34 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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