Some young adults wants independence from their families as soon as possible. Others young adults prefer to live with their families for a long time. Which of these situation do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion
Independence simply means gaining freedom. Being independent comes with a lot of benefits , it boost self-confidence, increases thinking ability, it also increases hapinness. Should young adults live longer with their families or live on their own as soon as possible? Personally, i believe young adults should live on their own as soon as possible, they should have that independence. I feel this way for two reasons, which i will explore in the following essay.
First of all, living with families for a longer time affects your decision making. As a young adult you will have to keep on consulting your families before you make decisions pertaining to you and this is not really good from my own perspective, For example, I am a young adult who just graduated from the university. I hardly make decisions on my own, my parents decide what we eat, they decide when i can go out with my friends, they decide the kind of jobs i should apply to. Perphaps if i was not living with them, they cannot possibly make all those decisons for me. Being independent give one that freedom to think, to fend for one's self , to decide what to do and when to do it. A free man is an happy man.
Second, living with families for a long duration increases ones reliance on families. However, being independent limits this dependence on families. For example, while staying with your family, one might not to some chores like cooking, washing, among others. These activities might be done by younger siblings, and this might make one to be lazy. Furthermore, being independent makes one to improves hardwork. Hardwork in the sense that one gets to improve him/herself in all things you do because there is nobody to assist you and this will as make you a better individual and stand out among your peers.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that young adults should live independently from their parents as soon as possible. This is because making decisions by one's self is very important for development of an individual. Also, depending on one's families for needs can be reduced if possible eliminated.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, however, if, really, second, so, while, for example, i feel, in conclusion, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1735.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 360.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81944444444 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71383358145 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.519444444444 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 540.9 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.8329123094 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.75 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.15 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.355732080661 0.236089414692 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112801028557 0.076458572812 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108298925688 0.0737576698707 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.235895737374 0.150856017488 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.063988016863 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.38 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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